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No Handlebars

These crickets keep chirping
in the warmth of this midnight
reminding me that it must be close to twilight.

Whispering thoughts,
the wind spinning around my frame-
suddenly I feel so vulnerable.

It's so cool, so bone chillingly cold
these bitter feelings,
left alone with  myself again.

I feel like I'm falling
spinning in circles chasing a tale
that I don't even have.

Everything is so new,
these feelings, this place...
It's like riding a bike with no handlebars.

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Babe, I'm so lost like this. You know the old saying 'You tease who you like' Well, you found out the hard way that I hurt those I like. Yet you stuck around, didn't you Mart?

You don't believe me when I out and out say 'I'm madly in love with you.'
When I laugh and say you have a nice arse,
when I ruffle your hair or kiss your cheek.

What do you want me to do?
Will you ever believe me?

I'm scared Martin. I don't think I love people often, that takes getting close, and I push away those that get close. Why did you have to keep coming back.... Only to do this to me.

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  • Livingemptyspaces
    June 7, 2008
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    Hey babe, this was really good! I'm so sorry about him though. You can't help it.

    -Les


  • willowprincess
    June 6, 2008

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    i like very much. good job.
    question though. where did you get the song title? who does the original song?

    • Livingemptyspaces
      June 7, 2008
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      Just stopping by to comment on this myself, and noticed your question.

      The original singer is Flobot. Though she did it wrong. The actual song is Handlebars

      • willowprincess
        June 7, 2008
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        ok, that's what i thought. i recently discovered that band and fell in love with them. LOVE the music video for that song.


  • Nakatrea
    May 27, 2008

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    Great way to use the word bank! only twilight and midnight are rather different.... one's like 9 the other's 12... but thats ok i loved it anyway.

    If i could make a suggestion:

    These crickets keep chirping
    in the warmth of the twilight
    reminding me that midnight is coming.

    or something like that. it makes a little more sense. you do not have to change it Its a simple suggestion. and don't just copy what i wrote if it doesn't fit your view of the poem. and your own style.

    I am very please. Good luck

    ~Kat *♥*

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