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Basic Black

I cannot cope with this duress
In basic black, I wear this dress
I feel my life has no more hope
With this duress, I cannot cope

I sit and mourn in basic black
I only want my sweetheart back
A dress that I have never worn
In basic black I sit and mourn

I bought this dress with him in mind
To look my best and well defined
And now my life is such a mess
With him in mind, I bought this dress

There’s nothing worse, I live a curse
This dress has now become perverse
I watched them put him in a hearse
I live a curse, there’s nothing worse

 

 

 

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Photo: Sebastiana - by: Stephen Hender.

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  • Ellis gold member
    January 28
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    This one is a corker!

    Goodness, I so love reading these remarkable poems.


  • Ithica silver member
    June 5, 2008

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    The all purpose black dress... Not always worn for the most pleasant ocaisions but nonetheless always a class act, especially for grieving...


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    May 30, 2008

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    Don't despair!
    The language spoken by a small black dress is universal. Someone will come right along who speaks the language.

    nice one

    love
    D


  • Princess Perdue gold member
    May 29, 2008

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    Wow! simply love it lol. Well done and good luck in my contest.

    Shaz xx

  • Eusebius
    May 29, 2008

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    Bravo!

    Oh, this is sensational! I don't know the form, but you have executed this perfectly! I love it, love it, absolutely love it!! bravo.... bravo... bravo!!!


  • RedAquarius
    May 29, 2008

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    Very mournful and sorrowful. A lovely form that fits the sadness in this piece. Good take on the prompt


  • myrataal silver member
    May 28, 2008

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    You write such wondrous perfect poems.

    I think you can recite poetry in your dreams, too. With each line to perfection.

    I my eyes you are the Queen of Poetry.

    Love
    Myra


    • Amera gold member
      May 28, 2008
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      aww... thank you! Comming from you that really is a complement.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    May 28, 2008

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    I loved your take on the picture for this contest, slightly dark but so very, very sad.

    All the best in the contest,

    Love
    Sue


  • blueyez
    May 27, 2008

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    This is beyond amazing. Whenever I feel uninspired all I have to do is read a poem from you and I am overwhelmed with the feeling of awe! I can't find words to express my envy of your writing! Write on oh great talented one!
    Peace and Love always


  • NeonRose
    May 27, 2008

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    Grand write, great rhymes, sad theme! The makings of a winner! Good luck in the contest!


  • Pure Thought silver member
    May 27, 2008
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    I enjoyed the emotions pouring out of her.Emotions you played into the poem so well.


  • HaleyMary
    May 27, 2008

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    This poem is so powerful and very sad. Loss of love is hard no matter how people look at it, but it's worse when the person the other loved passes on, especially if it's sudden. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    yep. You got this one. (Slinking back to the end of the line) Love it. Lane

    • Amera gold member
      May 28, 2008
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      LOL, who are you kidding, I read your entry. It's fantastic!

  • Papagallo
    May 27, 2008

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    This poem is so dark and sad. Wonderful wording and sadness. May you do well in the contest.


  • PerVirtuous
    May 27, 2008

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    You have put on your Poe cloak and dug us a wonderful pit of depression to lie in and enjoy this poem. Wow. I could feel the energy and how it was converted to sadness. Should do very well in the contest.


  • StarEyes
    May 27, 2008

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    Are you ok Sis? I know what you are thinking about, I am sorry. I know the feelings too... You have the summer and I have the winter...

    You did a great job on this one!
    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • cricketjeff gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    This is proving to be a fun contest! And that poor woman has no idea what she should be thinking!
    Another great entry, lets make it as hard as possible for the judge shall we

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