As we go on
We'll remmember
All those times we
Had together
As we grow up
And change forever
We will always be
Friends Forever
As our lives change
Or whatever
We will still be
Friends Forever
As we go on
We'll remmember
All those times we
Had together
All those times we
Had together
Are the one's we'll
Share with pleasure
(Tell our children)
All those times we
Shared with pleasure
(Told our children)
Are the ones that
As we go on
We'll remmember, Forever
As we grow up
And change forever
We will always be
Friends Forever
As our lives change
Or whatever
We will still be
Friends Forever
As we grow up
And change forever
We will always be
Friends Forever
As our lives change
Or whatever
We will still be
Friends Forever
Author notes
5/27
me and my friends sing in the locker room at school. And today we just started putting together random words because we were feeling mournful about leaving school.
And we turned this into a song that repeats. They allowed me to have the song since it was my idea to combine the 3 stanzas into one song. It was so awesome 40 guys all singing this in a locker room the sound wafted into the school and people were talking about it later calling it the most beautiful emotional thing they ever heard.
I guess you had to be there to see why it was so emotional for everyone to hear.
5/28
we sung it for the last time. Only this time we mae it much more complex. And this are the results.
Comments
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Still boring
This doesn't tell what those memories are, how they affected you and your friends. This is just ramblings, and nothing is changed. I am so sorry though, because a poem with this title could tell the reader about 4 years of high school in the 7 stanzas that you have. Instead I am seeing the same words repeated over and over again. Like I said this reminds me of the song Henry The VIII by Herman's Hermits. I am so sorry but I can't say anything really good except there are no spelling errors. Thanx for sharing anyway. -
remember has an extra M in it
not one of your best, everyone is allowed their off days and i think this could be one of them
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i rewrote it, wanna give it another try. I think its better now.
Here's the link to the poem I want u to give a second try http://allpoetry.com/poem/4273093
where is that extra M? -
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'We'll remmember, Forever'
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hmmm
This sounds like gobbledygook to me, because each stanza repeats iteself in the nezt one, and whether or not you were searching for random words, the random wording stopped after the first stanza. I remember my senior homecoming, my senior prom, and the friends I made then. Before my senior year I was home schooled.
But even though I remember the fun I had during my senior year, this poem misses the mark completely.
My suggestion for this poem would be to put in the homecoming dance, the junior and senior proms, they guys that you had to fight off, and the like. But to repeat each stanza time and again, is like the song Henry The VIII by Herman's Hermits, where every verse was the same. This poem for me is a complete turn off. -
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i rewrote it, wanna give it another try. I think its better now.
incase u forgot what poem u gave a negative review to, here's the link http://allpoetry.com/poem/4273093
And in that version the stanza was supposed to repeat itself into the next one.
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WOW!
awww!!! that's so cool!!!
i wish the guys at my school would do something like that.. they're all stupid..lol
it'd be interesting to hear the tune!
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