you kissed my lips so passionately
you held my hand so tight
you held me as if I was glass
to afraid to let go
but now you’ve dropped me
I lay on the ground
glass cutting into my heart
I thought you were my happily ever after
the love that never died
but now I lay awake at night
wondering what beauty I ever saw in your eyes
you left without I care
leaving me in silence
to shocked I didn’t know what to say
now I’m drowning in my tears
my sorrow will last for years
but why do I still love you
I just can’t understand
you keep on telling me to go
but some how I find myself at your door
knocking for more, screaming for more
I don’t want to feel this way
my heart is bleeding in every way
I just wish you could came back to me
without you I just can’t breath
A contest entry
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and btw you totally inspired me to write YAY
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"you held me as if I was glass
to afraid to let go
but now you’ve dropped me" i love this line
"I thought you were my happily ever after
the love that never died
but now I lay awake at night " i love this
"wondering what beauty I ever saw in your eyes" URGH omg i am so there it perfectly represents that change of someone in your eyes fantastic
"but why do I still love you
I just can’t understand
you keep on telling me to go
but some how I find myself at your door
knocking for more, screaming for more " omg im crying
i so agree its like "you've hurt me soo bad why do i still love you why do i keep coming back when i know it's just gonna hurt me" GREAT GREAT job
that las line "without you I just can’t breath " is soo amasing
this is a fantastic poem great great job
the emotion is soo real i think anyone could realate even those who haven't experianced this--but those who have this is breath taking
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i love the emotion
this piece is absolutely brilliant espc. these lines:
I thought you were my happily ever after
the love that never died
good luck !
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Wow! I love this, its so full of emotion! WOnderfully done! Thanks for entering & good luck ♥
P.S. Remember to put your name and option number in your AN's! -
Very good
Well written. Love your flow paperbackwriter i am impressed as i always am when i read your poetry.
fangs
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brilent! *crying*:,
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thxs im glad my peom touched you
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this is the 2nd love poem ive read in a row....
this one is sooooooooooooo much better than the other one
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