Plagued with a simple disease
a chilling story
unravels before you
She was but a teenager
dealing with the tortures
of everyday life
[Come to me my darling]
Whose there?
[Only me]
Whose there?
What spoke to her
she was unsure
unrecognizable voices
[I'm here, take a few steps]
I don't see you
[Follow my voice]
I found you
Confusion clouded her mind
blurred her vision
effected her ability to think
[That's it darling]
Alright I give in
[Listen to my directions]
I'm listening
Splattered with stains
her purity fading
insanity took over
[Pick me up]
I have you in my hands
[Touch my blade to your arm]
Am I doing this right?
Like this she was overcome
by the thought
of freeing her trapped soul
[Slowly slide me down]
You never said it was going to sting
[It will fade after a few cuts]
If you say so
Crimson red like the
forbidden rose of love
liquid seeped away her flaws
[Don't you feel better?]
I guess so
[I will save you at your desperate times]
I promise to return
Easily addicted
to his overpowering words
on and on went this battle
The knife claimed to save her
when all he was doing
was hurting her more
Author notes
option 2
anything in the brackets is the knife "speaking" to her
A contest entry
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Comments
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Awesome write, very interesting and I like the two talking to each other, thanx for entering and good luck.
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I loved your idea of the knife speaking to the girl! Really cool, original idea!
~Angi -
this is a good write nice work good luck!
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This is deeply dark. A wonderful poem. I wish you the best in the other two contest. Thanks for entering.
~Kystal Angel
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This is a very well written piece and very intresting certainly different. the imagery was great
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WOW amazing....can really relate to this ....keep it up xx
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Borderline dirty pretty...NICE
this was gorgeous.
I love the imagery it held me the second I started reading...great job and keep writing -
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thankyou :]
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wow... simply amazing. It's a new twist on an "old" story... a beautiful twist. Truly addicted to something that's supposed to help... wonderful!
Great job, good luck in the contest! -
wow
that was a great poem, i loved how well it was written, it speaks truth with fiction. Keep on writing
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