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Dying Dream

 

 

bleed for Jesus
you ignorant heathen shit
demonstrate your
inferiority with your
shifty brown eyes
fear of hot dogs
tears of guilt

entertain your masters
and tell your secrets
so that you may be freed
from your own
backwards ignorance
and savagery
with boots of grace
ropes of love and
pissed on by freedom

through humiliation
you can pay them
tokens of debts owed
for their kindness
in bringing their
rich, educated, civil,
compassionate
way of life
to you

as the blood dries
future scars crust over
the death of
G.I. Joe's compassion
through neglect
is justified tenfold
in twisted minds of
experts on all subjects
worth knowing
on Fox News

as sobriety turns
to face away
defining the real
human tragedy
of Abu Graib
as a mirror
reflecting the
withered heart
of a dying
dream

 

 

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We need to hold ourselves accountable, or without accountability we become monsters.

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  • Ariosto II. gold member
    June 17, 2008

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    A violent poem, for some violent deeds. The type is a bit hard on the eyes but then again so are the pictures.
    All in all a very apt presentation that fits the subject so, so well.

    Powerful piece!

    Thanks for entering the contest.


    • PerVirtuous
      June 17, 2008
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      I was looking for a font that looked like spatters of blood. I knew it was a little difficult to see, but it fit the mood. I enlarged the font to make it easier to read. Thanks for the kind words,

  • ecrivain01
    June 14, 2008
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    True as far as I got ...

    but it was too difficult to read so I didn't finish it. That font is terrible.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 28, 2008

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    oh my.. what a hard hitting stark poem..

    OK. I'm ignorant and don't know who Abu Ghraib is... but I agree with your message in your ANs

    Fascinating write!


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    BRAVO....Well done my dear. I loved it. Hard hitting, power packed, full of graphic imagery that leads a reader on a hell of a ride.

    Thanks for a great read.
    Love ya

    Passions


  • malmadre gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    When it comes to being accountable, those people who were supposed to be in charge lost theirs, and lost yet more in the eyes of the world. Just a few pictures tell the whole story of people showing no compassion for humanity. Sometimes human behavior is less than that of animals....a dying dream indeed! defending freedom is not establishing dominance over the world...well done!


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    May 27, 2008
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    *shirl shrinks in fear* Whatever you say Al.. you're the master race...


  • rhondasail
    May 27, 2008

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    I never like watching the news in America...it's too biased with divisive, so-called Patriotism...You have a sharp edged point here...and it hits home with precision. Well written. Peace, Rhonda


  • Man of Harlech silver member
    May 27, 2008
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    The last stanza is haunting and, clearly, the truth.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    Hard hitting, reminder of deeply troubling events. There are many times we have to despair of the world. Fighting for pacifism, bonking for virginity and torturing for a humane system of government.

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