As time slowly goes by,
please continue to be at our side.
As Holidays come and go,
hold us in your hands and don't let go.
Help us to face each new day,
as we await our coming day.
As time slowly goes by,
please continue to be at our side.
As Holidays come and go,
hold us in your hands and don't let go.
Help us to face each new day,
as we await our coming day.
In a list
A contest entry
- #75 Short Prayers by daviscth.
300 points, ended May 28, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nice job on this A.P. Very inspirational work and moving! THANKS!
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Nice write, full of hope and quite upbeat. Congrats on your HM.
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Congrats on the honorable mention trophy lovely. This was really fantastic. The words are so deep and yet so ... simple. You really did a splendid job.
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Since the last piece I read of your's wasn't really poetic, but more just a response, I wanted to read something else. I like the simplicity of this prayer... could be on thats said at dinner time every night. Oh, before I forget, congrats on the honorable mention! Only thing I could suggest to do differently is change the last line seeing as you used "day" and "day" together. There's lots of rhyming words for day so it seems like you could come up with something that would make it flow a little better. But thats just my little piece of C&C. Keep up the great work!
--Tim
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aww this is such a beautiful prayer sis! well deserved trophy!!
~Michaela~
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This is a beautiful short prayer and the picture is awesome. Thanks so much for posting this in my contest.
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