Two little girls
In there one little world
Looked at the changing sky
And watched the cloudes unfurled
The sun goes down
And there are stars all around
In this little world
with the girls on the ground.
Amazing what magic
The Earth's sky can hold
Expesialy when young eyes
Watch it unfold
Author notes
this is retarted but.. 'I.C. Winner'
also, the first stanza, I cant seam to work it out, any help?
A contest entry
- † Iron Poet † 3 by Penz.
450 points, ended June 5, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Nice write! I don't see why I.C. Winner is retarded? Hehehehe... I was also not strict with the 'writing the option' part but I guess I will let it pass.
Anyway, the first stanza doesn't bother me at all. It's okay as it is, not unless you change it. It's always your call.
Good luck! -
I like this it is good. I think you did a wonderful job and I can imagine the two little girls as I write. wonderfully written.
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