There’s days when I wish
You could see me, just so
You’d know what you destroyed –
It’d make me feel good, but
Who needs a loser like you?
Author notes
first thing that came into my head, very much a first draft - and i most certainly don't need its subject - not now. Sassykitty wrote this about who she used to be
A contest entry
- Closing The Door To Your Past by Viyanna Rosemarie.
1233 points, ended September 21, 2008, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Pretty good for a first draft. I think a lot of people can relate to this, because often times in a bitter breakup, you see the person as they truly are.
It is short, but brevity is king(or queen, in this case).
Nicely done, and good luck!
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I understand this poem very well. Very good first draft. I think it would be better if it wasn't so abrupt.
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Very short and to the point I like this. I can think of a few people that this would be nice to send to as well. You captured the anger and hurt all in a few simple lines. Well done.
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wow this is great for a first draft i love it and ive been there when you just want the other person to suffer because of how much you have suffered and right now im working on getting a loser out of my life he is cheeting on me and it realy sucks but this poem told me that there is always a way and it ia easy to stand up to the losers in our world today
this is a great poem and i hope you keep righting
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When I read this, I can sense the heartbreak is still fresh or at the very least not forgotten. Thanks for entering and best of luck.
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