I guess I saw it comming
I saw death's shadow around every corner
I didn't think it was you he would take
You were so young
You had a life ahead of you
And now all you have to look foward to is an empty grave
How can I go see you put into a hole?
No one really thinks I can do it
So now I have to do it
I have to prove them wrong
Like you would have wanted me to
So later at your grave I'll cry scilent tears as they lower you
I will stand there and remeber you
That's when the tears become loud
They will reach every living soul
They'll all know your gone
Yes when you left the world felt a loss
But the minuite the first tear hits the ground they'll know it was you
That the world lost
Author notes
My family member just died and I took it really hard. I need him, I know it selfish but I don't know what to do with him. The weird thing was people that I had never met said they were sorry it seemed like the world knew. But then I wonder...if they knew wouldn't they be as messed up as me?
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Heartwrenchingly Beautiful
It is a hard thing to cope with, death. I lost my grandmother when I was 24 and it rocked me down to my very core...she was my other mom...my rock and my world. So I can understand the deep greivous emotions seeping through you like a life stealing poison...You do go on though...and every once in a while you will feel them in the whisper of the wind. Great write, beautiful tear rendering read and my deepest condolences go out to you.
~mandie~
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I guess I saw it comming comming-->coming
So later at your grave I'll cry scilent tears as they lower you scilent-->silent
But the minuite the first tear hits the ground they'll know it was you minuite -->minute
other than those errors (which can be easily fixed), this was beautiful.
i am so sorry for your loss & i wish you and your family the best of luck in everything. -
mezmerizing......
i could feel death and the soul.... all of the emotions put into this...... it is very well written..... thank you for sharring a peice of your soul....
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although the wordchoice and rythm is truly beautiful (and don't get me wrong, it really is a very good piece!!) -- it's sort of... err... depressing. although i have no room to talk; i have some pretty depressing stuff, mehself. bah.. ignore me!!! i just discovered a new type of music and i've been real mellow and happy.... bah. over-all, an amazing write!
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