How you doing sweetheart?
They may think you are an angel of light
Honey with your curly blonde locks
tiny little bikini
displaying it around for all of them to see;
Do you enjoy causing hurts
with your adulterous smile
staring at my eyes
trying to get to him;
Do your naked nipples feel lonely
against the satin sheets
while I fucked him
and you longed for him?
How do the drugs feel?
as you degrade your body on the stage?
enjoy being high all the time
you little skank bitch
Oh what is that?
Did you think it was fun to call
so late at night
with your giggling voice
while my tits wrapped around his dick;
He lied to you about his name?
you were carrying his baby
and he disappeared
sorry little slut
Is it fun feeling lonely
with no real man
running from man to man
cause ain't no one can trust you?
How about your kids
from 5 different daddy's
Oh you tested positive for drugs
they took the babies away.... sorry lil' harlett
Angel of light... pfff. you wish;
Heck no!
ain't no one feel sorry for you hoe;
feeling your pussy pulsating
wishing for some dick
Is it fun being lonely?
enjoy endless one night stands
with no love;
Did the wedding ring turn you on?
did you think it was some game;
Oh you are trying another one?
what you enjoy cascades of bad decisions;
following you around
do the drugs slowly kill your beauty
whatever was ever there?
mmmmmmm yes I enjoy him
to bad he was never yours
little slut
too bad bitch
thats what you get
that is what you deserve for messing around
with married men
Author notes
Don't assume this is a personal poem.
B. I learned recently that a good way to manage your anger is when you want to call them a name, visualise what they would look like AS that name. For example, you want to call an agitator a dirt bag. Now envision them as a giant bag of dirt. I want to know, in poem form, where else you could take that idea.
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A contest entry
- by xxRainbowDawnxx.
440 points, ended July 1, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anger (Mis)Management by breedluv.
1400 points, ended August 19, 2008, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Here's some options you've not seen. . . by Tom The Invader.
625 points, ended September 26, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hatred at it's best. by Rejected Easter Egg.
1080 points, ended October 25, 2008, 39 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What you think?
Comments
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This isn't what I was expecting, but I didn't say it had to be the writer who was addicted to pain, so... I like it. It has attitude and it's sassy. Way to go. Congrats on the wins you've had so far.. Best of luck in the contest and in life.
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This is different, certainly. I like how you made it sound like something out of Harlem. Well done.
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Congrats on your bronze AND I see you have a gold cup too!! Well done!!
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Wow! Scathing! Remind me never to cross you! Good write!
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WOW
First of all, i thought i commented this poem. I suppose it never went through. For keeping you waiting, i'm dreadfully sorry.
Though, i've got to say. This is one of the best and bitchy-est poems by far. you've got great flow and a wonderful story line. however i'm horribly sorry to hear that it happened to you.
Hope you're doing better.
^^
Thank you and good luck.
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Some people that we loved with the best of intentions, act in such a way that it is near impossible to continue to love them. This slut, or what she sounds like to me, gave you no respect and trust me I have dated one guy who cheated on me and another who sure he didn't, but he was a rapist technically... so, I know what it's like to date the worst.
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Wow, Great write, very angry and powerfull. Well done, Thanx for entering and good luck!
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I shall remove this from the contest. Thanks anyway. It's not very good anyway.
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Its cool I just needed to let out steam and I wrote no biggie
I hope it didn't offend you or anyone not meant to.
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wow, this poem really screams at you!
full of anger
...some spelling errors: "disappeared"-stanza 5
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I am so sorry...
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wow this was an awesome and enjoyable poem to read. it felt like you were standing there screaming at the person right in front of me. the freestyle type of style that you used added to the emotions behind the write. in some places it did seem...awkward.
great write.
Thanks for entering
All the best
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i'm not sure if I liked this or not. It was very hard hitting, and not really, in my eyes, about heartbreak. It was just ranting at someone.
However, there were some good lines, at one or two places i may have even cracked a smile!
A lot oof emotion behind this, i'm still trying to make my mind up!
sunny
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hmm. nice write. I really enjoyed it... but I'm wondering which option you chose. If you would put it in your notes; it was a rule.
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My options is in the notes.
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My poem is called GORE ME not BORE ME..jkjk!!!! ....but yeah honestly i REALLY did like it and it was easy to get into within the fisrt stnza but i see NO GORE ....if only if only you had some gore then you could have won!!!! thanks for entering -GOREgous Gore
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my own daughter..... well at least you make your mommy proud!! great write!!
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dang those home wreckers anyway
great write surging with contempt.. verry heart felt
max clappies to you
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It certainly sounds personal!
Some strong verse here and the themes of jealousy and revenge are well played out, however, too much cussing spoiled it for me.
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I really enjoyed this piece, I know how it feels to be chuffed about having aguy that you love and he went out with a tramp before hand so i could really relate to this
Lonely girl having a string of one night stands im sure a lot of people can relate to these lines.. lol
Nah, in all seriousness i really enjoyed this i thought it was amazing
nice write...xxx
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holy smokes!
my sweet little friend, you got some venom in you don't you? WOW! I'm stunned beyond words, but at the same time impressed with rawness you put down!
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