reeling in pools
of her own sorrow
she cowers
in fear
fear of lying,
fear of being consumed
by her demons
as she tantalizes fate
reaching vertigo
trying to turn back
screaming,
breathing,
heart pounding.
she collapses
as the washing machines
keep going
round and round
... and round
A contest entry
- When Life Gives You Lemons....(Round 2) by Jfd.
600 points, ended June 8, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I feel this write could have gone a bit deeper, but it still had some interesting aspects to it, thank you for taking the time to enter
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i have just been looking in the poems in this contest and yours caught my eyes, i think this has a lot of raw power. though the mention of washing machines was too close to the picture, that said the rest of the poem stayed away from that and i liked it
flip to what i think though i am not the judge 
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