Temptation lures,
pulls me back to this,
this release valve of the mind.
Curious how comforting,
it is to unhinge the mind.
Flowing like a torrent,
the unresolved issues,
pour forth from the abyss,
soaking the script.
Fingertips scathing,
burning an afterimage of the mind,
into something resembling,
coherent sensibility.
Background chants,
summoning forth introspection.
Riding the cresting wave of sonic muse.
Bringing forth unknown ways of describing,
the swimming hunger to put mind to word.
Unleashing on the suspicious conscious,
a sub conscious more powerful than imagining.
Although only a fleeting glimpse,
the lust for renewal,
expression of intuitive reasoning.
Really just a deeper look,
into a reflection only felt,
rarely seen.
How simple to speak vacantly,
pleasure of mind to word,
secret syllables reveal the writer.
Demeanour determined by detachment,
of words to coherency.
Author notes
Happy Birthday! Just 4 more days
A contest entry
- Make eyes sparkle with your words by ladame.
450 points, ended June 1, 2008, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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thanks for sharing!
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this is awesome, a wonderful write, and i enjoyed so much reading it
congrats on the trophy, and keep it up
take care
stephanie
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great write. you have managed to describe the creative process of writing and the way it helps reveal our hidden aspects to ourselves quite brilliantly.
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Great job. Very descriptive, and eloquent. Nice.
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excellent poem with powerful unusual expressions...
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I've nominated this for spotlight on the front page.
I would have actually given this my gold trophy, however, I seemed to have skipped over it in my readings, and I only noticed it at the last minute when I had already placed everyone. I love this - it reminds me of a better version of my own writing, with a similar style and use of words. Let me know what you think, if you ever get chance to read anything I've written.
Please feel free to enter my new competition - this poem actually almost fits the description.
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Beautiful extended metaphor and flow!
xxx
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Well sir, if this doesn't win then just blow me over plumb friggin' dead ~
: ) (Very powerful expressions, beautifully transformed and crystalized.)
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Yes, words to paper feel good! Glad you enjoyed the c-boost!
And I think that often, it's the (sort of) automatic writing that packs the most punch. Before we clean it up to much. Punctuate. Etc. ...
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Ha thanks for the confidence boost! As a poet yourself you can probably relate to the powerful pull writing has on the poet. There is something so satisfying about putting your thoughts at a point in time on paper.
It feels even better when it reads fluently!
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This is such a lovely write with such great imagery. I loved the line "secret syllables reveal the writer". Well done for this and all the best for the contest.
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Thanks for reading. I really enjoyed writing this poem. In fact I wrote it in about 10 minutes, which is quite quick for me, because my thoughts on the subject were quite clear.
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