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In shadows I take hold.

I begin
a chill, tingling
top to bottom.

I transform
embellish my inner devil,
become master

of destinies.

In shadows,
I wait salivating
eyes, on my prize.

I take hold
wicked breath
seeps out of evil lungs.
Intoxicates

 as you realise
I am more than an illusion.

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Credit artist--
http://gri3v3r.deviantart.com/art/Not-an-illusion-75924545

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  • xKrista
    May 28, 2008
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    Wow I love the imagery in this. Great Job!


  • perfectsunset gold member
    May 28, 2008

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    Ooh wow sis this was so powerful and beautiful! Love your dark imagery and thoughts. Brilliant write & congrats on the bronze!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 28, 2008

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    Love that title!! The whole piece seeps darkness in the most delicious way!! Gave me a chill..


  • LeilaJayne
    May 27, 2008

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    I love this alot, especially the last line, works really well, brilliant take on the prompt!!! Good luck x


  • Weltt
    May 27, 2008

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    This was brilliant! I read this a number of different ways and enjoyed them all. I'm not sure what you were trying to relate with your metaphors here but to me it had kind of a dark sensuality to it. I guess that's part of what makes poetry wonderful! Anyway I really liked this and wish you the best of luck in the contest!


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    I LOVE THIS!!! Dark and sweet in a very creepy way!!! Gave me shivers...those wonderful kind you know? Love a good write on pure darkness from time to time...


    Az


  • LadyDementia gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    Wow wickedly dark hun I'd say worth the wait but think I'm last to post ..lol. Beautifully penned, good luck


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      May 27, 2008
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      hehe , thanks darl..I put my head down and worked hard on this one

      my dark side has definitely started coming out hehe


  • Angelflower
    May 27, 2008

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    AHHH!!! this was well worth the wait sis!!
    You did a wonderful job!!! I really love how dark it is.. And dark is what she wanted!!! lol.. Best of luck sis, you did a really good job..


    Angel


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      May 27, 2008
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      hehehe I so tried to really mke it spin chillingly scary hehehehehe

      Thanks SiS


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    I can see the results of your hard work and tweaking

    This is a wonderful take on the picture sweetheart with something more than just dark thoughts there. Truly amazing.

    Best of luck in the contest

    Love
    Mum


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      May 27, 2008
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      oh thank god for that hehehe..alls I can say is I am happy with it now lol

      Thanks Mum

      U tooooo


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    May 27, 2008
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    wow that is both chilling and e v i l.

    Nice.

  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    May 27, 2008
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    I missed this one. Drats!
    I look forward to reading what you come up with.

  • LadyDementia gold member
    May 27, 2008
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    Hehe you penned as much as me


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      May 27, 2008
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      i penned more now finally hehehe..i got it out at first but I played nd changed a word here and there a hundred times over lol..Love it now..i think it's scary hehehe

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