I stand naked
before your eagle eyes;
Vulnerable
Front page exposure
Featured;
in my own thin skin,
waiting for you to
cover me please.
Hoping your prying eye
won't destroy my attempts
at pleasing you.
Praying,
you will finally accept
the 'me' of me,
without further questions
or, need for in-depth answers.
As I transmit to you
will you just
receive the transmission
without feelings of defensiveness?
If I come to you naked
will I be received?
A contest entry
- Naked by AJ Morelli.
2500 points, ended June 3, 2008, 26 entries
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boy, its tough to be naked in front of someone with eagle eyes...lol
i think this piece "tells" vulnerable more than "shows" vulnerable...
more poetry, less prose would help here i think, my opinion
i can't thank you enough for entering this here...
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Great job again with the prompt. Very creative with the prompt. Naked does make one vulnerable.
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You are so wise, Z, thanks for your comments, all of them lol
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a good piece of poetry, i think of the band joy division here with radio, live transmission, the band are back fresh in my mind with watching the recent film about them.
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Thanks Ian lol
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