I put myself between you and her
because she was too small
to hit you back.
Taking any fight meant for her
and letting it all be taken
against my chest.
You scream at me
as you call me her name
too drunk to know the difference.
I tightened my fist
for the first time
against you.
Hit back.
Landed two.
Fell back.
She begins screaming
for mommy to help
and it is worthless.
You are on me
tightening around my neck
as you are grabbing there.
It is darker thoughts now
as I stop thrashing
a calm falls over me.
Nothing left now
but to have her leave
and let you do this
without a fight.
Author notes
SPEAKING OUT ON ABUSE:..started to be one...kind of ended up being number six though.
CHILD ABUSE PREVENTION: option 8
title suggestions? I don't think I like mine...
A contest entry
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other title suggestions?
Comments
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This was a great piece.
Thanks so much for your entry.
Wishing you the best in the contest.
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This reminds me very much of how I would stand in front of my drunk Dad while he went to hit my sisters and take the hits instead, I started fighting back when I was 13 it was not easy ever and you have shown that well here.
Great write
♥
Thank you for your entry in Child Abuse Prevention Contest & Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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You scream at me
as you call me her name
too drunk to know the difference.
You are on me
tightening around my neck
as you are grabbing there.
It is darker thoughts now
as I stop thrashing
a calm falls over me.
Nothing left now
but to have her leave
and let you do this
without a fight.this is sad poem which I can relate as I had alcoholic mum and I will say my peice to her one day when I am strong enough to do so good luck in the contest
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This is a very sad and touching poem. It has sooo much potential, but the lack of imagery and metaphor hinder it a lot. The content you have already is really good, it just needs to pop out and be more vivid, if that makes sense. The ending was really painful yet true in those instances. Thanks for entering, and good luck
Jeanette*~ -
"I put myself between you and her
because she was too small
to hit you back." such amazing start you really had me touched before the poem had barely began i like that...
all in all this is a very touching piece of writing well done and best of luck
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