Behind your eyes is where I lie
Driven to entice your every desire
I’m the pain hidden in your sigh
Becoming your universe is what I require
Spreading through your body, entangled around your spine
Breaking your spirit, scarcely will you be aware
I’ve already taken over you with just the use of time
Writhing into my grasp, I am despair.
Author notes
Option #3
A contest entry
- † Iron Poet † 3 by Penz.
450 points, ended June 5, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Things really rhymed well, but I feel like you are telling story but I got lost in translation once the poem ended.
Despite that, it's a good write, I can feel your creative juices flowing freely in it.
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Awesome
I think you did an excellent job of using the word block. I like the imagery of dispair being virus-like especially in the line,"spreading through your body, entangled around your spine." Great job.
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