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I Love You

I wanted to tell you never to call
again
but to do so would break my
heart
when all i wan't is never to fall
again
never to come
apart
you left me standing here all
alone
didn't even tell me where you had
gone
another fall allover
again
my heart is pounding so hard
within
waited by the phone for you to
call
just keep on starring at the
wall
i feel my life is coming
apart
when all i wanted was your
heart
if i ever told you not to
call
it would be the beginning of another
fall
each time a knock comes on the
door
i know it is you just like
before
but time will come my greatest
fear
when i answer the door you won't be
there
but i will always love
you
through heartbreaks and
falls
i will be sitting by the
phone
patiently waiting for you to
call



















Author notes

This is kinda of a style I made up myself
just wanted to do something different.
Capital letters and puncutation was intentionally
left out. except for the first letter ( I )


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  • Flowergirl
    March 28

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    i feel this way sometimes too it is hard when you love someone but they break your heart very nice write and keep it up...


  • Visit.Me.On.Mars
    January 8

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    Awww well this poem is really cute i like it
    and i like the fact that you stepped up and tried something different
    Nice Work
    and good luck
    ----Janette


  • rose-red
    September 23, 2008

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    I love this write! I have felt this in my life, which is why it touched me. I really hope to hear more like this, especially with this new style.
    ~RoseRed~

  • piccola silver member
    August 3, 2008
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    thanks for the entry


  • maralisa silver member
    July 31, 2008
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    a very deep poem a great style full of strong emotionsgood luck in the contest


  • Darc Soul 69
    July 11, 2008
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    i love how original you have made this piece and also i know that i can relate to the poem that you have written here. I thank you for showing us your new style and thank's for commenting my poem it was truely appreciated. I can't wait to read more of your work..............


  • queens1
    June 20, 2008
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    Very original and fresh. I liked it.
    Patty

  • Hypocritical Oath
    May 28, 2008

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    Like it

    I liked this a whole lot, and knowing that you were experimenting with a new style to yourself gives you bonus points with me Well done, and good luck!

  • goalsv
    May 27, 2008

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    Very nice style, and great job of writting. Such a deep emotional poem for sure. A feeling most have had I am sure. Good luck in the contest.

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