With the aid of the breeze, they float with ease,
wriggling and giggling, whisp'ring absurdities,
dandelion seeds breaking their puffs when the wind is rough,
sighing and flying, leaving home and fluff.
Look close and you'll spy, unseen by lesser eyes
that inspect and dissect, scrutinize and analyze,
little faces, little feet, tiny shoes, polished neat.
Let us tarry with the faeries mid the flowers sweet.
But watch and be warned: be gone before morn,
lest enraptured you be captured and away be borne
to be kept as a pet by the lovely Faery Queen,
moddled and coddled and fed berries and cream.
A contest entry
- Rhyme and Flow part 3 New - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
4000 points, ended June 15, 2008, 51 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - FAIRES IN FAIRYLAND by Treasure 5.
1050 points, ended May 7, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank you I will have another one tonight good luck in contest.
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B-E-A-Utiful!!!
You didn't win with that!!! Oh my gosh, that was awesome!!! It was beautiful and flowed so wonderfully.
Man, that's too bad. You would have totally won if I hosted the contest. You're a great writer, and have an awesome imagination.
It not surprising because it happens a lot on this site. Really great poems get overlooked, and then the other junk wins.
Sorry I'm supposed to be commenting on your poem and instead I'm ranting
Okay, my favorite part of this entire poem was:
Uhhhh...
Hmmmm...
*scratches head*
Awwww forget it, I love it all!!! It's too good man!!!
I'm speechless!!!
Hahahahaha.........
I can't wait to read more of your work. I'm going to go check it out right now
Great job!!!
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This was so wonderful. Rhyme and rhythm speak so deeply to me that reading this was intoxicating. I love how you have woven this magically. With a warning like that I would tarry all night just to be captured
This is masterful, thanks for sharing.
Khia
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love it
I love your work, they are beatiful. Loved the flow of words, and you have a eye for the little things to be seen. -
Awesome job. Keep up the great work and keep writing great pieces like this one!!! You have enough talent for probably all of us here at Allpoetry! Truly a great write. Such an astoudning and amazing job. If you feel like it, check out my poems and feel free to comment them! Be honest, please! Thanks so much for sharing this piece with all of us here at Allpoetry!
Oh, I just started a new contest! Please take a second to view it and try your hand at it if you wish!
Here is the link to my new contest! http://allpoetry.com/contest/2431805
Thanks so much! Have an awesome day!
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Enchanting
a very wonder filled write. full of wit and whimsy, its own graceful charm, fine work
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The second line made me chuckle. I like the internal rhyme of "lest enraptured you be captured" and "moddled and coddled," as well as many more internal rhymes. I think you mean mottled instead of moddled. The last line also brought a smile at the thought of being forced to eat berries and cream. The first stanza is a little choppy because of the varying syllable length of the lines, but I really like the poem.
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mottled means spotted or unevenly colored. My "moddled and coddled" is a play on the term "mollycoddled".
I'm really glad you liked the poem. It was fun to write.
celtic queen
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Leave it to a Celt to see the fairies in the milkweed. I have so often felt exactly the same. Watching the tiny dancers drifting off on the breeze, or a single breath. When ever I see a small child sending those little fluffy parachutes into a cold, clear autumn sky it makes me wish I was young enough to recapture the imagination that escapes us as we grow older. Loved this poem!
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When I first read the title it made me giggle. I think it might be because I'm getting tired, but anyways I really enjoyed the poem! The first couple of stanza's reminded me of Disney's first Fantasia movie when they perform the Nutcracker ballet and they have all these fairies flying and dancing around imitating the four seasons. I don't think I'll ever look at seed puffs the same again...lol! thanks for sharing this awesome poem!
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Thank you for this lovely entry in our contest, We found the flow a little off in places but it was a very strong poem and a joy to read.
Congratulations on the HM a well deserved trophy and we look forward to seeing more from you in future rounds of the challenge...Sue and Jeff
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