I say I love you
and I kiss you goodnight
I say you're the best
Oh, how I wish I was right
The truth is, Mom, you get on my nerves
Your voice, so shrill, has lost its verve
You stress, you whine, you complain
I don't even know how I stay sane
Sometimes I wish you would just go away
Leave me alone, find somewhere else to stay
And maybe then I could get a perspective
But right now, ridding myself of you
Is my main objective.
A contest entry
- Skeletons in the Closet? by XHollowXEyesX.
800 points, ended June 2, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Is this any good at all?
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See what I do is instead of kissing her goodnight and saying ' I love you ' I say ' Ew, don't fucking touch me.' It tends to get the message across a little clearer.
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I didn't find the writing to be all that good compared to some of your other work, but the meaning and the truth of it makes it real, I have the sort of same objective - getting away from my mom.
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wow.
this is an awesome and powerful piece of writing.
I can truly feel the pain and anger that you feel towards your mother. The words and style that you used to describe your emtoions was beautifull and flowed well.
amazing work
thanks for entering
All the best
~Hollow~
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Wow...this is just...wow! Wonderful write! It's sad, yet defenitely a skeleton in your closet. This is AMAZING!
Mylee -
Ah, it's called cutting the apron strings. This step is necessary in order to have the courage, the will to set out on your own and learn to make your own way, but you have described it so perfectly. Good luck in all your endeavors.
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