A whole paradise dwells
in seconds
that have our names writ all over,
moments spread out
encompassing eternity.
Fate playing usual game,
sprinkled so many miles between us,
as heart yearns
for a dip in your eyes.
Pining for clocks to rewind
and stilling our paradise...
Author notes
PROMPT IS:
If I could, I would freeze time just so mine with him/her would never end.
In a list
A contest entry
- If I could... -closes after 15 entries by Touchof1der.
600 points, ended May 28, 2008, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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So beautiful... your word are mesmerizing and emotional... Lovely write! congrats. on the Bronze!!!
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Thank you so much!
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Absolutely divine! This draws you gently into the cocoon of two lovers and bathes you in the desires of their souls. Lovely job. Thank you for sharing this with me and best wishes to you in all of your endeavors. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use dear poet. Good luck in the contest!
♥ Touchof1der -
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Glad you enjoy it!
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what a beautiful background...one of my favorite hues.... and then the words that fold within it all..such longing..
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Thank you....
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Love it! Very good write.
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Thanks dear!
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