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Time icicles

A whole paradise dwells
in seconds
that have our names writ all over,
moments spread out
encompassing eternity.

  Fate playing usual game,
  sprinkled so many miles between us,
  as heart yearns
  for a dip in your eyes.


Pining for clocks to rewind
and stilling our paradise...


Author notes

PROMPT IS:
If I could, I would freeze time just so mine with him/her would never end.

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  • Ithica silver member
    June 4
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    So beautiful... your word are mesmerizing and emotional... Lovely write! congrats. on the Bronze!!!


  • Touchof1der Moderators member
    May 28

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    Absolutely divine! This draws you gently into the cocoon of two lovers and bathes you in the desires of their souls. Lovely job. Thank you for sharing this with me and best wishes to you in all of your endeavors. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use dear poet. Good luck in the contest!
    ♥ Touchof1der

  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    May 27

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    what a beautiful background...one of my favorite hues.... and then the words that fold within it all..such longing..


  • Talloaks silver member
    May 26
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    Love it! Very good write.

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