Lover True
You see a beauty beyond your reach.
You hear a voice of silk to smooth your heart.
You say there is so much I could teach
by what I do. I am a piece of art.
But you see the light instead of dark.
You made a goddess out of a devil.
You're blind you never wish to part
nay you'd rather hold me tight and revel
Revel not for what you can not see . . .
do not wish to keep me here anymore.
For I can't bear past sins with he.
Release me knight.
~Unfaithfully yours
Author notes
It's suppose to be a twist on a Dear John letter I guess. I got stuck with the end. Anyway it's just a draft but I don't know what to do with it now. So comments and ideas are very welcome.
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It's pretty. Seems a bit more formal than your usuals, which I like.I thought the ending worked well.
"You're blind you never wish to part"
^I guess I might change the "you" here to "and" but otherwise, looks pretty good to me!
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