I sketched my many hues
on life's imperfect paper
And my colours
bled beyond the page
Then I drew hope
upon my soul
Author notes
Prompt: White Crayon, 20ish words
We all have many sides to us. Mine spill out here. I dwell a lot in the dark (black), but the light (white hope) I also like to draw
In a list
A contest entry
- Prompt 12 entries/ 20 words more or less by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended May 27, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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There is a powerful message in this wonderfully penned work. I love how life is the paper and our emotion is the colour to draw hope for the soul. The shape of the poem complements the nature.
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Excellent
Oh my an incredible use of 20 words. Congrats on the silver. -
Oooo i like it! You are making me think there might be hope, maybe...lol. Im amazed at how you found such depth from that prompt!! Well done =] x
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Many hues on life's imperfect paper, colors blend beyond the page! What a fantastic choice of words to express your thoughts. So short, criptic and so right.
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Short, yet perfect.
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wow.nice poem =]
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Wow! AMAZING write Cuz! I love how you described the colours so precise and profoundly! The metaphor and imagery were off the chain!!! LOL! Stellar job!!
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how inspiring i draw hope upon my soul...uplifting and wonderful SiS. Congrat's on the silver
Cin
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Excellent
Wonderful expression in a short poem. Congratulations on the silver.
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I Loved This
Yes I would agree we all have many part to us. Some of us more colorful then others. Then to bring in HOPE into your poem is beautiful. Thank you I needed to read this.
Much Love
Your Sis
Kelle Marie
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I love what you did with the prompt here. Very well penned piece of hopeful aspiration. Nicely done!!!
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How wonderfully beautiful and full of hope...yes it is easy to live in the shadowed safety of black, yet when we come into the white we often find so much excitement and hope...lovely work...thank you for sharing!
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Love this hun! You have really shown both sides of colours. I really like the upbeat message that you have written in the end. Thanks for sharing this with us.♥
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A hopeful ending, you penned a wonderful piece from such a plain prompt! Very creative, you never cease to amaze me! Good luck in the contest
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Love how this ended positively. The openiing two lines were brilliant! Your words display such talent of your pen!! masterfully crafted!!
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As long as there's the tiniest glimmer of hope you'll always find the strength to go on.
A beautifully expressed thought.
Best of luck in the contest.
Love Margaret
P.S. Would it be ok if I borrowed your crayon honey?
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You sure can hun!
I need to scribble with it a lot to try and get that hope...
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Beautifully worded. Wonderfully rich for so few words.
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aww .. this is soooooo enlightening Jacks! Such a strong ending! ...and all from a White Crayon. weeeeeeeee!
Steve
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Talk about finding the depth in something so bland! That is one thing that never ceases to amaze me about your poetry love. You always manage to take something mundane and find the deepest and most beautiful part of it. Well done hon, as always. Good luck!
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Gal
Always so deep as you leave the reader wondering why such self scrutiny and sadness. Take a look in that mirror gal. you may like what you see. Others do
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Simply beautiful use of 20-something words.
Quite thought provoking.... and for such a tiny little piece big impact. LOVED it! Good luck in the contest!
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Wonderful as always
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Aww..beautiful dear..beautiful metaphor...All the very best dear! many
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You sketched a clear and compelling picture poet! Good luck in the contest!
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Aw
Beautiful words that draw you in..
We all draw that hope don't we ??
Julie xx
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Beautiful
Another amazing job my friend
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I love the opening here... sketched my many hues on life's imperfect paper... very intriguing. From there, you draw hope upon your soul. That concept is nice in that you don't say how many tmes you sketched on that imperfect paper. I just hope what you drew was exactly what you are hoping for. Excellent poem!
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Nice write from this promt Sis!
Best of luck!!!
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Lovely
A very brilliant take on the prompt
Wonderful few words that speaks volumes
"...life's imperfect paper...Then I drew hope"
Bravo! Great imagination and choice of vocabulary.
Wish you the beat in the contest
Take care
David
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Wow this was just so beautiful and REAL sis. You really opened up your heart in this one, in such small amount of words; you've expressed hopes bigger than the horizon. I loved it! Good luck in the contest
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Splendidly delightful...
Very creative poem you have penned
Wonderfully descriptive in colour and taste
Best of wishes to you
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Just lovely Jackie .. 'drew hope'
this is just greats
soul emblazoned xoxox Lib x -
Great wording for that prompt....you do so well with these!!
I especially like,
'then I drew hope
unpon my soul'....very uplifting!
best wishes in your contest.
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oooh nice take bella
tasha
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Cool
Wow, that was very nice. You're very good with these limited word things. Very cool write. ~Peace~Gar
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