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Crying

My Heart is breaking
But I don't know why
I'm sure his is to
Though he doesn't cry
I feel the tears coming
Yet I push them back
I can't help but hum
That haunting tune before
I break into pieces
though I've already cracked

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  • libithina
    May 26, 2008

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    the last line really clinched it!! 'cracked'
    even though the tears were held 'cracked' in the end
    tears are healing so that is good
    but so sorry for the hurt s well penned x s


    • hela
      May 27, 2008
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      thankyou

      thanx for the comment it really helps to know that other people like my poem