Oh, the emotions that are invoked within me
Each and every time I look into your eyes
And such a feeling of safety overwhelms me
As you tenderly kiss silent my cries
The touch of your hand
Makes my body burn like fire
I haven't quite figured out
How your voice sends me shivers of desire
Your smile melts my insides
And your breath warms my cold
The confidence you instill with me
Turns my shyness,quickly, bold
The intoxicating scent I inhale
The one that's only you
Sends me into such extasy
That I can't help the things I do
The encouraging faith you have in me
Brings me closer than you really know
I only ask for one favor, my sweetness
Go easy, PLEASE take it slow
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Thank you for your beautifully expressed entry, Josie
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Thank you!
~DAWN~
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well done
nicely written and my favorite lines are these:
"The encouraging faith you have in me
Brings me closer than you really know
I only ask for one favor, my sweetness
Go easy, PLEASE take it slow"
Good luck in the contest!
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Thanks! Those are actually my favorite lines as well!
~DAWN~
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I really really felt this one...this is so much like how I would write one of my love poems to in ways..to even just be simple and from the heart with not only the happiness but how he ' in your words' kisses silent my cries
...loved that line heheh
some words seems a bit misplaced, iterupting the flow but only in a couple of little spots
Could just be me...lol
Thank you so much for a great lovefilled poem
Good luck
Cindy
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Oh my, I really liked this write.
I did have trouble understanding the grammar in
line 4, however.
But this was fantastic!
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Thank you so much for commenting!!!! What part of line 4 didn't you understand?
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