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A Drowsy Kiss.

A drowsy kiss does not show gratitude
with pleasure,
                but with scarlet slouches.
this careless gesture invites decay,
without a moment
                of cluttered perfection.
this charming substance    does not connect.
it is the same as night petals
closing in
          glittering      voi
ces.

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  • Kirs
    December 25, 2008
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    Stunning

    From a bold beginning, to a lilting end. Thank you, very much.


  • miss midnight
    June 19, 2008

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    "this careless gesture invites decay."

    whoah...im loving that line..

    and for like....5 seconds i thought that the last word in the poem was french or something...and then i realized it was just "voices" seperated..haha.

    i feel really stupid...lol
    but yeah..

    amazing.....


  • The Burning Year
    May 29, 2008

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    whaaaat.....
    this is crazy...

    "this charming substance does not connect"

    I'm at a loss for words right now...really....