I'm sitting here, just gazing at the phone,
wishing and hoping and longing for one of us to crack.
You don't think you've done anything wrong,
truthfully I don't know if you have.
I feel as if this is all my fault, but,
something stops me from saying the one word,
that word that absolves my sin, and my guilt.
A word, THE word, is sorry. And I don't believe that it's due.
A word is just a word. The feeling isn't there.
Even if I shout it or whisper it, it means so very little.
All I want is to rid myself of this feeling that haunts me so,
Is this a reason good enough to warrant it?
The trouble is really I don't believe it is.
It was an over-reaction on my part to begin, and then
anger on yours. Therefore, surely I am to blame.
Two days have passed with nothing but silence from one another,
wishing and hoping and longing for one of us to crack.
I want to, I truly do, but again there is no emotion, or feeling.
This silence must progress, forward and onwards.
The word I cannot say would solve this, I am sure, but,
you too are in the wrong. Two days have passed, which seem like eternity.
For us, as one, the silence will pass, only to bring anger,
contempt and finally absolution. Maybe this absolution is necessary. The End.
I know the one word would solve it all, bring the warmth and love straight back, but,
my darling, my truest, my dearest love, it is one word I cannot say.
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I love it!
But true love can say sorry. You can always break the ice by calling up to asking "I don't blame you for what happened...Tell me honestly, objectively, was it I that was wrong all along?" Even if it results in venting frustration and pain, you'll know and have earned the truth. And communication is the only way to have a relationship. I've been there for three years, bottling it all up, not speaking to the other person...and sometimes taking out my frustration out on others. Never a good thing to do. Even a hello in retrospect shows that you care.
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this is truly amazing.but i somewhat agree to colepoers below. the poem may be better if you didn't mention sorry. you could've put it in the title or in your author's comments and leave the reader to read between your lines and figure it out. but none the less. it's truly a wonderful write!!
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Great poem, I enjoyed your prose, but there are a couple points to touch up on and improve your piece. First, "The trouble is really I don't believe it is." is awkward, as are some other lines in your piece: even though it's prose, you still need to maintain good versification. Also, I think the poem would serve its point more truthfully if you didn't even mention "sorry" in the piece, or perhaps mentioned it only in the title.
Just my thoughts.
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I really like this poem and agree with it. "sorry" to many is so hard to say esp. if you do not truly mean it. I would just like to say that this was a fantastic job and to keep up the good work!
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