When quivery petals meet quivery lips
and white sails meet mistrals invading old ships,
when sun’s burning fire abandons its frame,
and soft pink of flower turns white flaring flame
I call your name.
You’ll find me in gardens, contented and free,
and dreaming beneath the magnolia tree
where butterflies sip yellow nectar and dew
and grass blades are covered with silvery hue
I think of you.
In rolling leaves' chalice, beyond eagle sight,
there, over horizons and bird’s streaking flight
where rain fades to whisper and rainbow’s aglow
the way of creation ago and ago
I love you so.
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetry Inspired Emily Bronte by Room without doors.
700 points, ended June 8, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PIF I Deserve A Gold by Rakerman1.
475 points, ended August 9, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - It's All About the Rhyme by BlackSwan.
600 points, ended July 27, 2008, 30 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Secret Garden. by Poetryintheblood.
550 points, ended January 8, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Thank you for your beautifully penned entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Exquisite images, rhythm and rhyme. Beautifully written.
Congrats on the gold!
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Beautifully rhymed and so well written. Congratulations on your gold trophy.
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Breathtakingly beautiful. I loved the way you set this out. The flow and rhyme were perfection.
Very well done
Raker
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Congrats on the Silver-beautiful write filled with scent!
Hilly
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-Good Luck (already commented this one)
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Thank you Hilly.
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Thanks for double comment and for this nice, shiny silver trophy.
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excellent~
Saw the title and had to read this one
Beautiful
Best of luck in the contest...
I entered too do hope you come visit me
Susan~~~
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I love the background color and picture!
This poem is absolutely fantastic!
The rhyming the metaphors the imagery the detail
This poem is a true masterpiece!
-GL in contest -
Outstanding
I loved the choice of imagery in this poem, you created a fine portrait filled with love and nature. This is exactly what I was looking for in this contest. Thank you for entering.
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So romantic, this is absolutely beautiful!!
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Smiles
I like these images, there was a magnolia tree in another garden, long ago. When we appreciate beauty around us, we wish to share it with the ones we love. You have set the poem in lovely lilting verse, beautiful to envision and to hear. Good luck!
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Thank you my dear friend. Your support is always here to lift me up to some better mood.
~Sonja~
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Oh. How wondrous a poetic voice ...
and how rich in subtle images and hues ...
Loved this!
Suggestion: leaves' ... do not forget the apostrophe ...
Ah. I am intoxicated. Pure ambrosia.
Love
Myra
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This is pure beauty! As your imagery is so vividly written with the passion of love spilling from your pen!
Flow and rhyme is just perfect, which sweeps the heart away in a soft flow of romance!
Very lovely my friend!
All my best to you in the contest!!
Linda
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Thank you dear Linda.
~Sonja~
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I love white flowers, like the magnolia and i love how you've applied the metaphor here... just beautiful.
~ Nicolette
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Yes, I know how much you like it.
~Sonja~
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A lovely write and presentation. Heartfelt. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Deep expression of emotion. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Lovely rhythm. You express your love so beautifully in this piece. You paint a delight picture with your words. Well penned and much enjoyed. Best wishes in the contest.
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Your comments are always a joy for my heart, dear friend. Thank you.
~Sonja~
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Passionate
I love the visual you've painted with your words. Very beautiful, a wonderful write. Subtle eroticism without being direct. Very nice. -
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Thank you Xianaria for your kind visit to my poetical shores. I am glad that you like it.
~Sonja~
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wow - this leaves me sighing...
What a beautiful flow this has...it matches the mood of the poem, you imagery is divine, what a soft & gorgeous poem..you rhyme very well, seamless
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Thank you my dear Tara. When I read your poetry I have to sigh too. My imagery, you say... this is the reason why I must write. I can't keep all thin things hidden. Still, most of my poems will be published only in my books.
~Sonja~
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