I would start at sunrise;
the branch horizon,
I watch for shadows to end
shortened in thinner twigs
at noon
maybe I'd place a treehouse here
watching my growth,
this accomplishment reaches thirty feet high
and twelve wide
like fruit, nut stems
intertwining each other
Author notes
I used dawn and orchards
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A contest entry
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1200 points, ended June 1, 2008, 17 entries
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600 points, ended June 2, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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Oh, such a fine tree poem.! I am smiling at your free verse and thinking you must do well in school.
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I've been meaning to get back to you sooner
Thank you for the kind comment on my effort to advance... After forgetting so many times, I finally remembered to ask my daddy about the publishing offer in your final notes. He agreed that I make a pseudonym which is; Daisy Emma Smith. You can use that for my copywright.
Again, the gold is still on my mind for a poem I myself realized wasn't too silly!
Daisy
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Such a whimsical abode you create, or maybe let, encourage it to create itself.
Marlene -
"the branch horizon", well the entire first stanza really is beautiful and wonderfully creative - loved it. I also liked the metaphor of trees and growth here. Trees are one of my favourite metaphors.
A lovely poem - I've so enjoyed reading this one. Thank you for the entry.
~ Nicolette
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