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A Hazy Day


 

 

 

 

Gently cascading upon nature’s dreams,
sweet drops of spring freshness
beckon blossoms to listen

as the sun struggles to glisten
upon the rippling pond
just beyond the beaten path

breaching the gloom of shadows,
illumination graces
with enlightenment;
bestowing hope of life

as it should be~

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt is this quote:

" Poetry is a mirror which makes beautiful that which is distorted. "
~Percy Shelley
pic credit:www.worldwidehealth.com

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  • Peteskid gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    i like this a lot, congratulations on your well deserved award, this poem takes the reader on a journey taking in the world through the poet's eyes...wonderful imagery here...PK


    • jasminerose
      May 27, 2008
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      Thank you so very much PK for the very lovely compliment on my entry!!
      It is always so wonderful to hear your thoughts on my poetry!!
      Jazzy


  • kaibab silver member
    May 27, 2008

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    Such a lovely moment of enlightenment...I wish every morning for every soul to be as wonderful as this...


  • poet2angels gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    I love the ray of hope shiniiiiiig from this beautiful poem!
    The pic is perfect as well!
    Such a lovely addition to the contest and a perfect take on the prompt!!!

    Lynda


    • jasminerose
      May 27, 2008
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      Thank you so very much Lynda for the lovely award and beautiful comment!! I am so delighted that my ray of hope touched you so
      Jazzy


  • Samplicity
    May 27, 2008

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    Beautiful!
    I love the scene depicted here! I like the flow and calm rhythms it has. Another wonderful write!


  • maralisa silver member
    May 27, 2008

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    Gently cascading upon nature’s dreams,
    sweet drops of spring freshness
    beckon blossoms to listen

    as the sun struggles to glisten
    upon the rippling pond
    just beyond the beaten path wonderful take on the promt good luck in the contest the picture is stunning to


  • PerfectImperfection
    May 27, 2008

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    Such a very soothing piece. Very well composed, with such a tranquil glide of beauty and thought. Nicely done!!!


  • Sonja
    May 27, 2008

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    I am impressed with your words, with the random rhyme and its perfect flow. Great my dear friend, great.
    ~Sonja~

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