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Genesis of Eternal Stars


An innocent with you,
I know nothing of my needs;
and you kindle an inner warmth
as unique as a balmy whisky
melting the glass
that surrounds it.
This power,
this passion in
the core of my being, is
you.

You slow release love
that feeds my soul
and frees my heart,
til I am drowning in you
til I can’t breathe,
I can’t breathe
a single thought,
that isn’t stained
with the scent
of your soul.

Take me now,
let’s slip
through fractured dreams
and drift…
drift through a genesis
of eternal stars,
where my body dissolves,
and is soaked up by
everything
that is you.


 

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 5, 2008

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    Ah..sharing the secrets of the love through the wonderful immages and deep sketches of the love around your words brings the eternal joy into the words of your poetry hwere..well done...


  • Patpowers silver member
    July 15, 2008
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    What a nice work again Sara Jane! Romantic and brilliant work in this. I commend you again!!!


  • parenchma
    June 16, 2008
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    If you could bottle that...

    http://allpoetry.com/poem/4240843


  • individuality gold member
    May 30, 2008

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    ah sweet love, sipping on starlight as the spirit waltzes with the heart, passionate wonder and generous moments. a good poem


  • leo2
    May 30, 2008
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    This comes about as close to describing that feeling when I'm in love that I've seen. When the passion of the heart and mind spill over on the body there will be a mess to clean up in the morning I assure you. Congratulations on the HM.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long

  • Bad Bill
    May 28, 2008
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    Intense and powerfully portrayed, this is love poetry with muscle--excellent work.

    Bill


    • sarajaneUK
      May 28, 2008
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      Thank you Bill, for your comment, glad you enjoyed. Thank you sj


  • Rovingone gold member
    May 27, 2008
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    What a wonderful portrait you have created. You deserve to be rewarded for capturing it all so well. I like the words, kindle the inner warmth as unique as a balmy whiskey. Melting is a great descriptive words too. You seem to portray melting excellently.


    • sarajaneUK
      May 28, 2008
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      Thank you for reading and commenting, I'm pleased you enjoyed. Thank you sj


  • Star Shine
    May 27, 2008

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    I love this, I am such a fan of intensity in romantic poems, and this surely captures that feel to a tee. Suxch creative and novel phrases, evoke vivd images and feelings. Well done. Thank you for your entry.

    • sarajaneUK
      May 28, 2008
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      Thank you for the HM, very much appreciated. Thank you. I wish you good luck on your wedding day, with much love, health and happiness always. sj


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    May 26, 2008

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    What a beautiful piece you have
    written here my friend! What a
    wonderful feeling to have someone
    in your life that makes you feel
    like this. Lovely work here as
    always and good luck in this contest!




    Jeremy0826


    • sarajaneUK
      May 26, 2008
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      Thank you Jeremy for you kind words, very much appreciated. Thank you sj

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