a blackbird
came to
visit me
and in the woods..
the bluebells
are all
dead now.
a fallen
silver birch
lies in a grave
surrounded by
buttercups
which grow.
Author notes
Not entirely rich in metaphor but also not an immediately obvious piece either. Although music is involved this hasn't been written as lyrics or a song. Here is the song:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qI8I6qcxWyU
In a list
A contest entry
- When Life Gives You Lemons....(Round 2) by Jfd.
600 points, ended June 8, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Niceeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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hmm very thought provoking, I'll admit I don't see a direct connection with the prompt, but the mind wanders and sometimes take you to not-so obvious places.....this is an interesting, enjoyable write, short but sweet....thank you for taking the time to enter!
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I like your stuff - it is always individual and never panders to the reader - it sorts of grabs you - let's go and runs off.
I think your work is really good - however a general lack of thinking and desire to be challenged by people - means perhaps will not got the comments/applause/praise it deserves.
I think this is wonderful, and I like most of what you do.
James
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I don't think many people understood this one.
Maybe you did though? (lol)
Great comments. I really do apprecite them.
Thanks James.
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