Oh, to be sweetly innocent once again.
To roam naivety scenes yet into now.
This would be intensity rare, but how?
To be in position to take people as is.
Never attempting to question motives hid;
this would be going back doing what I did.
To drown in bubbles of make believe it's so.
To laugh because, I simply didn't get it right.
This would be back-tracking to my heart's delight.
A contest entry
- The passion that eludes us....this one is for the grown ups. by ElijahsRaven.
300 points, ended July 6, 2008, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
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good
i liked this poem.refreshing, well said.
I especially liked these lines:
" To be in position to take people as is.
Never attempting to question motives hid;
this would be going back doing what I did."
jingle
(ps: do you know why the winners haven't been chosen yet? I was just wondering . . )
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Thanks, Jingle, it is judged now lol and thanks for your lovely review of this poem of mine, I love it lol
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A stand-up entry
Bravo...on to the finalists. -
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Wow, this is sensational, thanks lol
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a good piece of poetry, aye, to sweep back the years and find the time where our innocence rippled in our spirit, it would be good.
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hahaha lol
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