They traveled far and wide,
speaking of His word.
Then drank wine along the sea
watching the colors of life intertwine.
Dancing in perfect rhythm
to the tunes the wild did play.
Laughed and giggles wildly,
as they enjoyed the gifts displayed.
Their Creator blessed them
with so many things.
Happiness and bliss
and knowledge…purity.
They spoke of His word
and the people that He saved.
Chatted about what life could be
ten years down the road.
He was so fond of her,
enjoyed her brains and smile.
She thought he was the toughest
next to her Creator.
Daily they would draw straws,
on the mission for the day;
Of course their Master is the One,
who really laid it down.
They really had it going on
the blessings and the love;
Too bad for that damn fruit
which messed everything up.
Author notes
What did Adam and Eve do BEFORE
the fateful bite?
What did they talk about?
What did they think and feel?
Did they even like each other?
I would like:
Free Verse
Edited work
Plain background
Poetry labeled appropriately
Did this mainly, because, I had to work out some issues.
And it didnt work..but hey I tried lol..im like Eve, Im not perfect, I like the forbidden as well.
A contest entry
- Before The Apple... by Dalaney.
950 points, ended June 3, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Nicely done sweetheart, lent a bit of Tory to the old Adam and Eve story..
Excellent write baby...Love you...Scott 
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He he he. This cracks me up. Good job.
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Excellent write here
I so enjoyed this read and its perfection keep up the good work
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and i would never misss reading this one noooo nooo noo you have written a masterpiece so thoughtfull vivid and well writtten great poem hun
i love it loadsssss
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Nice,
A very interesting contest, wonderfully inscribed ponderings with great content. Thanks for sharing V~
All the best within the contest sweet soul. 
Much love, Timothy
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