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Thrashed

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I feel so thrashed deep inside from crying
pain so piercing I feel like dieing
Haunted and scared when I opened the door
finding my son dead on the floor

Eight months has gone by since my son died
today going through his things I cried
Weeping from the very core of my being
touching his things, remembering and seeing

The precious little boy that I raised
now he's gone I feel so lost and dazed
Confusion, insanity set in last night
painful surrendering cries was my plight

Crossing almost the line of no return
the loss of my son my heart does burn
Can you imagine pain worse then labor
all that's left is memories to savor

He will always be twenty-four forever now
imagine the pain, trying to get through it somehow
I'm so tired from grieving for my son
so very thrashed I am, is all I want to do is run

 

 

Written by: © Kelle Marie Stavron, All rights reserved

May 25, 2008

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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The death of a child is the most painful experience there is, that is now my experience

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  • Tzipora
    November 8
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    wow. this is deep.


  • penman gold member
    September 27
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    Powerful

    Wow, what a intense write. So filled with a mother's pain. Thank you for sharing and congratulations on the gold.


  • Lady Altheia
    July 13

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    Hoodwinked 129

    Awww, so sad. I am sorry for your loss. It is never easy to survive the death of a loved one especially when it is a child. Congrats on the gold trophy. You have been hoodwinked because someone cared.


  • xXemo-teddybearXx
    March 8

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    wow
    this was good
    and im sorry about the loss
    the words were fantastic
    great feeling and emotions
    great job
    xXalyXx
    his emo teddybear


  • Mistress Leala silver member
    March 2

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    Your words so touching it tears at me. I cannot conceive of losing a child. I have two and when I think of anything happening I cry. Your words are always so deep and true and sharing it will all is such bravery.


  • Thata
    February 16

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    the emotions expressed are almost physical to me.i truly feel the pain when i read your poems but as you say 'tears may fall then the rainbow will appear '


  • HeavensDaughter
    January 30
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    You express your pain so well. My heart goes out to you in your loss. This is so well written.


  • Roaddog Wolf
    September 30, 2008
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    Oh my goodness

    This is such a raw expression of pain that I feel so badly for your having to deal with. You know how I feel and hope for you to get through this. As far as a poem this is awesome and very deserving of the gold award both in your sharing of you heart and talent


  • Fallen Hard
    August 1, 2008
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    speechless

    speechless


  • ShaShay
    June 8, 2008

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    My son is alive but we are estranged at this moment. I can't imagine never talking to him again though. Your pain must be horrid, I can only compare it to my situation and that hardly counts. As much as I cry I can at least hope for things to change. I will keep you in my prayers. Such a touching write.


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    June 8, 2008

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    I read this poem when you posted it a while back. I didnt recognize the title. It is a sad and touching poem. It tugged just as much at my emotions this time around.

    Great Job.


  • StarEyes
    June 8, 2008

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    Hi Sis,

    I don't know how I missed this one I am sorry I didn't get to this before now...

    I know how much pain you are feeling, I feel it too, everytime I read one of your writes for Matt. This brought tears to my eyes too.

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta

    P.S. I continue everyday to keep you in my thoughts and prayers...


  • melphleg gold member
    June 2, 2008
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    :(( Kelle Marie, I feel for you. I read this and I want to cry with you. I want to put my arms around you, be silent and just cry with you. I'm glad you have this outlet for your pain and have good friends who care for you and support you through this pain.

  • Liquid memories
    May 28, 2008
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    Ahhhhhhhh I am sorry for the anguish that has permeate your body for long time. You have to learn to deal with it, but the pain will remain, as we miss the ones we love deeply. Lean upon God and He will sustain you during those awful days of anxiety and pain. All the best to you my friend. We were not created to feel comfortable with death, which is why the Bible describes it as an enemy. God sent his son, to do away with death, and ut will be so at the time that God chooses. May you be blessed and strengthen as you deal with your lost.

  • Lady Mak
    May 28, 2008

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    Such unconsolable grief and heartbreak

    Death of a child is the most painful experience there is, your heart and soul truely express this pain in this heartbreaking write. So full of greif, truama and despair.

    My heart and arms reach out to console you and I know no better way to do this than the way I have been comforted through Gods promises to us, this hope I know you too hold dear in your heart.

    Jeremiah 31:15-17.
    This is what God has said, "In Ramah a voice being heard, Lamentation and bitter weeping; Rachel weeping over her sons. She has refused to be comforted over her sons because they are no more.
    This is what God has said:"Hold back your voice from weeping, and your eyes from tears, for their exist a reward for your activity," is the utterence of God, "and they will certainly return from the land of the enemy."
    "And there exist a hope for your future" is the utterence of God "and the sons will certainly return to their own territory."

    1 Corinthians 15:25,26.
    For he (Jesus) must rule as king until he (God) has put all enemies under his feet. As the last enemy death is to be brought to nothing.

    Revelation 21:4,5
    And he (God) will wipe out every tear from their eyes, and death will be no more, neither will mourning, nor outcry nor pain be anymore. The former things have passed away.
    And the One seated on the throne (God) said "Look! I am making all things new." Also he says "Write, because thes words are faithfull and true."

    May you find comfort through the scriptures and knowing that God cannot lie. Every good word that he promises will comes true.

    Kind thoughts and thank you for sharing such a heart breaking write, may you find comfort through the promises God has given us through the scriptures.


  • Talking Toni gold member
    May 27, 2008
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    Keep On Writing..............

    and releasing these emotions Kelle. It is what you need. Another part of the process of death is the going through things and deciding what to do with them. And step by step you'll get throught this although the void will always be there with time it will be a little more bearable. Great rhymes and expression here...Keep on keeping on my dear friend!!!~~Toni~~


  • Emotions Muse
    May 26, 2008
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    Awe...

    My dear friend, I am so sorry for you. It is not right that such a beautiful person should feel this way, I know that the pain you feel is an unimaginable pain for me, but I hope you know I wish you peace. The poem as always is very good. I hope you find some happiness in today.

    Always <3 Aubry


  • Clinging-to-Life
    May 26, 2008
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    this is so very sad my dear...I do hope you can find some hope and something to hold onto. the good things, the laughter and memories...maybe veiwing it as it was his time to go...maybe that could help you. it all depends on how you look at it. I wish you the best of everything. Take care and I hope you find relief.


  • Spiritual Poet gold member
    May 26, 2008

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    hugsssss

    Kelle, I suspect that only the Lord above can take this away. Keep on going my friend, dont give up. You have two beautiful kids left who need you. God bless you, Mark

  • goalsv
    May 26, 2008

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    What a great poem. This has perfect rhyme and great transition, all the while your pain is brought into the readers heart. Such an emotional piece, digging down deep into your heart.


  • Truetome
    May 26, 2008
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    I don't know if this poem is in regards to you personally, the author of the poem, but the poem is very expressive emotionally, and feeling thrashed is not fun, and hurts deeply. I am really sorry for such a pain as this, and I cannot imagine what that would feel like. very well written poem. Thank you for sharing this::: the title says it all.

  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    May 26, 2008
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    Your poem is very touching. You have my complete empathy. Children are the most important thing in life. To lose a child in their prime must cause as searing pain.


  • daviscth silver member
    May 26, 2008
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    My heart still breaks for your loss sweetie. I'm right beside you in spirit, crying and grieving with you every moment. Your beautiful heartbreaking poem reminds me of my baby Chloe. She'll be dead 3 months on Wednesday. It seems like it's been a thousand years for me and I know you feel the same.


  • thorlorn thanatos
    May 26, 2008

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    Touching.

    A unique way of putting such grief into words, it really reaches out and captures all who read.
    Definately not what I expected but something to truly be valued.

    Thankyou for sharing this and good luck in the contest.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 26, 2008

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    Yes sis, that must be the most painful experience anyone could every suffer!! We love you and you are in our thoughts...
    Your heart's outpourings are always so touching...



  • Gwenevere
    May 26, 2008
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    For You

    Mother dearest so not cry,
    For this isn't our goodbye;
    I am with you safe and sound,
    In the air, I will be found.

    I will whisper in the breeze,
    Listen, can you hear me sneeze;
    I will blow and tickle you,
    Just the way you used to do.

    I will scatter drops of rain,
    They will wash away your pain;
    Come now walk beneath my tree,
    Once again you'll be with me.


  • Greaks
    May 26, 2008

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    May God Grant you patience....

    I could feel ur pain...I'm very sorry for ur loss... it doesn't change much and it doesnt look much but i'm very very sorry...

    May his Soul rest in Peace..

    A Touching write...


  • Arizona Sunset
    May 26, 2008

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    could feel this moment... may you find comfort in Gods word and know that your son is with you for always... s blessings always ~Trisha~


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    May 26, 2008
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    I love you aunty Kelle, and your in my thoughts always

    A very touching write, I know saying im sorry for your loss doesnt mean much but I truly am sorry you have to bear this loss..

    I love U and your an inspiring women


    Cin

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