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Coated

Bleached with prevarication's Clorox

guilt stains on conscience's collar

vanish

though infect the vision

until wrongs

all appear as purity.

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Prompt - White Crayon

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  • mysticstorm gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    Lovely take with strong imagery and depth...thought provoking in so many ways...the metaphor is wonderful, if only bleach would wash us to purity...thank you for sharing!


  • thepoetssoul
    May 26, 2008

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    This is an amazing take on the prompt
    I love the imagery you invoke within
    Splendidly done indeed
    Best of wishes to you.

    Tony

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    May 26, 2008

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    I like this and yes bleach does make things pure again esp.if you have kids that play in the mud with white socks on with know shoes lol
    Thanks for sharing


  • SEA angel gold member
    May 25, 2008
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    How fascinating...

    I like how you said "Prompt - White Crayon" I was just cleaning off mold with Clorox and really does get to the eyes so strong. I like the metaphor as reminds me of lipstick on the collar from an affair, perhaps. Stain may come off collar yet not from conscience. Well done!


  • michellemybelle gold member
    May 25, 2008

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    great take on this prompt. I love the thought of cleaning away the sin, bleaching to purity.
    Very nice.
    Good luck.
    Michelle

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