I throw on a smile
as you tell me to wait,
I shift my weight,
and smash my fist into you face.
Liar think you can stop me now,
or how about our "friends" that helped,
do any of you think I care,
the consquences can be forgotten for this one moment.
They see me laugh
as I kick you when your down,
like how you guys
smiled as you stabbed me in the back.
Well this is it,
try to hold me back,
I'm sick of hiding this hate,
time for you to reap what you create.
A contest entry
- Impromptu by x Gemini x.
525 points, ended June 11, 2008, 26 entries
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Thank you for entering my contest.
Ah. Very emotional, which is always good.
The only thing I have to point out is that "you face" should be "your face", and "your down" should be "you're down".
Good job
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Yessa'
I liked the MASKED feelings you didn't mask ' I throw on a smile.......and smash my fist into your face. and ....like how you guys smiled as you stabbed me in the back, AHH! venting is such sweet ... no sorrow here. time for you to reap what you creat..... now, getting even, that IS sweet sorrow, or as you put it,
i'm sick of hiding (Masking ) this hate. I think this was Fantastic. Good luck in the contest!!!
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Reminder:
The word does NOT have to be in the writing, so long as I can tell that it was kept on topic. The word, afterall, is a PROMPT ^.-
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Wow! I didn't see your word in your poem, but I can certainly feel the anger in it. You've put an extreme amount of emotion in this piece, and I applaud you for it. Good job. Patricia
Umm, you might want to throw that word *mask* in there somewhere before the host comes by.
Good luck to you.
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Your word is:
Mask
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