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inter-dependent

I'm interdependent
like I'm bent
and bruised

i try to say i can do it on my own
but that's all a ruse
never did it all
on my own
despite the roots I've sown
I'm grown now
no matter what is inside
throw in the towel
put down the pride

let them all know
i know what they do
is not just a show
but a silent "love you"

the let downs and forget its
and I'm so sorrys'
they stand there and take
its a silent "why me"

i say i cant change
and i don't even try hard
but to exchange what we have
i could not even start

i hope that one day
i give you all
what you want
and give away
all that proceeds to taunt

say no to the bad stuff
and yes to the good
i know it will be rough
but at least i will know
i stood
up

Author notes

AN: prompt is dependency : my sis (accidentally signed in as me - joined this contest... i chose to stick with it and try my best... dependency for me is daily life... i am dependent on a lot of things... caffeine , nicotine , marijuana and some special people in my life... i could and tried to write about all of them... but i wanted this to be a sort of tribute to my sis who signed me up for this not knowing how well this would all work out... my inspiration came flooding back in and whom better to give it then my sis who is one of them people i am dependent on to help me ... be there for me... and love me unconditionally... maybe one day i will be able to remember plans and show up on time... lol..

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  • echo-ink
    June 10, 2008

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    I think you did a good job with your word, we are all dependent

    on somebody for something. I especially liked stanza #3
    very realistic and so true. You and your sister are lucky to have each other to depend on. good luck


  • x Gemini x
    June 10, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my contest.

    I see this is personal, and so cant really be 'criticized'. (Though I will say, I would've personally used capitalization).

    However, I like how...bare it is. Just sweet and simple. Raw. Real.


  • JustGoWithIt
    June 3, 2008

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    I really love this.
    It kinda hit home even though it meant something different for me.
    It's Beautiful.

  • x Gemini x
    May 25, 2008
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    Your word is:

    Dependency