Is there any 'i' not dotted?
Or, 't' not crossed?
From once being spotted;
to now being tossed.
Not one unaffected emotion.
Not one tear unsolved.
I feel plundered by an ocean;
and, every inch of me's involved.
Dare I spare you one more glance?
Seeing how you rock.
I may not have another chance,
soon I'll be in 'hock'
Surrender's no longer an option.
I really have no choice.
You're now my solemn caption;
and we speak the self-same voice.
To turn a river 'blue' into a river 'red'
To captivate with complexity.
To dance ripples of delight inside my head.
I'm now yours with simplicity.
Author notes
Prompt; Affect
A contest entry
- Impromptu by x Gemini x.
525 points, ended June 11, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Overlook made up words
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Good job, lullaby,
you affected my heart towards your poem. Loved the lines: Dare I spare you one more glance, we speak the self-same voice. nice job, and good luck!!! -
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You are so kind, thanks bunches lol
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Thank you for entering my contest.
Really nice use of the word.
I liked the flow...it made it catchy. However, sometimes the rhyme seemed forced...overall, good language use.
Good job
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a good piece of poetry, aye complexity and simplicity, cross the i's and dot the t's lol and wave the flag of no surrender.
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no surrender love takes all. lol
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Wow, that was a pretty neat poem. It was really bouncing off the walls everywhere and yet it makes sense, especially if you read the word that you got. I like how you managed to have lines one and three in each stanza rhyme as well as lines two and four. That made it pretty neat. I can see how different words as muses can makes really different poetry. My word was 'wait' and my poem came out really differently than yours. Oh well, good luck in the contest
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Thank you so much, lol
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Your word is:
Affect
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