You're Such A Disgrace.

Disgrace is like the girl who's walking around the high school hallways

with her hair in her face thinking its taking the attention off of her but really

bringing the curious eyes back to her.
{her}

Disgrace is when your grades start Slip

Slip

Slipping.

It's getting home at one thirty in the morning.

Your parents are there waiting for an

explanation even though they all ready know what you've been doing.

{Drinking }

They just want to hear you say it.

Maybe they won't be waiting next time for their shameless girl.

You feel guilty and do it all over again. It brings you to that vicious cycle
(again and again)

Your self-esteem...gone

Your eyes hidden behind the hair.

Your frown hidden behind a fake smile.

Friends are gone...

its just you now

Your the only one that can pull out of the cycle of D I S G R A C E.

Author notes

I hope this is what you were looking for

A contest entry

Impromptu by x Gemini x. 525 points, ended June 11, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

What do you think?

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echo-ink
June 10, 2008

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OMG...........
I thought this was powerful, so full of emotion, you did such a great job with your word, I felt the Disgrace that the girl felt in this poem. very moving. Iloved it.
x Gemini x
June 10, 2008

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Thank you for entering my contest.

I think many of us can connect to this, simply because we were in the situation, or knew someone who was. The ending was particularly catching.

One bit of criticism - the flow seemed choppy in the beginning.

Overall, nice work. You did your word justice
XxunBeautifulxX
May 29, 2008

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This is a way good poem I would have had a hard time describing disgrace but you did it beautifully well done goo luck in the contest!
SarahEatsAirplane
May 26, 2008

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i hate being critical, it makes me feel weird because every piece of writing is beautiful straight from the writers mouth. (or hands or keys lol)
but..

i would left align this. makes it easier to read.... please lol.

okay. second line, you shouldn't repeat attention. figure a way to rewrite that so you don't repeat yourself.

maybe instead of repeating "it's... such and such" you should replace a couple of the "its" with "disgrace".

I would take out the "and" in the thing about parents and questions. make it two separate sentences.

but yeah.

run through it like that and... remember, those are just suggestions.

but this is super good. I didnt wanna change anything but.... yeah. lol.

i criticized.

ily.
x Gemini x
May 25, 2008
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Your word is:

Disgrace