Starts at a place
that I cannot recall.
A depravity structured.
The strongest of walls.
Dividing my soul
from the beauty of God.
Keeping me safe
from what is, and what was.
On this side pure darkness.
with sounds that raise hair.
Since, there was never a nexus,
I studied despair.
And I learned to bend shadows.
And the secrets of words
But I never found out
how I could be cured.
Because, fear has been stronger
then what they call love
I can eat it, or make it.
When push comes to shove.
Independent of structure.
Void of all heart.
The rift is my gift,
as it tears me apart.
Author notes
for the dead travel fast
Written December 24th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Tear Jerking poems by dark black rose.
300 points, ended December 8, 2006, 74 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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awesome talent
This is a fantastic piece rich and caught my attention too.
TWO THIMBS UP
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This is the first poem of yours that I've read, and I read it despite the fact that I looked at your allpoetry home site first! You might try letting your poetry speak for itself, without all the political and/or gender agenda that I found there. Because your writing is actually very good on its own. Bluebird -
Oh Oh! A rule! Look out... what was the rule? To blow magical yellow smoke up your non poetic ass and write "emo rules in my author comments"? Here's an idea, why don't you pick a username that isn't starring jared leto in your sad attempt at cliche gayness to the enth degree.
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i didnt even read it bro.. the title was awsome but you failed to follow one simple direction. so you are out my friend.
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well penned my friend, alot of emotions and you expressed them well in this poem great job my friend
good luck in the contest and thanks for entering
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That was a really awesome write i love it very depressing ut yet,i really hate to ask this question because it makes sound i wasn't even listening to what the poem was reading...but whAT exactly was this poem about i mean it sounds to me like you want love but not for it to ber forced? is that it? im sorry if i may be incorrect but i htoguht i would ask.....good luck ! Tami aka Akasha
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this is freaking fantastic! wow...this is heart wrenching writing. you expressed your emotions so well, this is beautiful! i'm sorry that i'm going with the same old cliches here, but i dont have the vocabulary to describe this any better, but it is a GREAT write.
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This is great, I love the rhythem and the flow that goes with it.
thanks for entering my contest.
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Yah...the rift is a gift and can destroy as well as strengthen. We would indeed be well advised to remember this piece in times of stress -- where the rift threatens to engulf our very being.
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wow good job
an good write
I agree with painfullymyown
this was a good write
good job an good luck
~Jen~ -
wow that's a really good poem!....u put words together that i would have never been able to fit and still have it sound good....u did a great job writing it....tho it is sad and true....i hate to be alone it's the worst feeling in the world...but maybe u'll find someone to help u out.....ne ways great poem! i enjoyed reading it...
xo~Shelly C. -
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well we all feel lonely dont we. that terrible seperateness, god is a bastard. he does not exist its just what your mind does to make you feel safe. alone in the universe gwyn rode earth eeek everyone was just made up in her head. the ultimate schizophrenic...i could be how the hell would i know. so how are your anal warts. i liked the adventure on your authors page.coincidence i had just written when are we ever going to evolve smewhere and then it popped up on your page. just felt like chatting after reading your adventures.so back to the pome it was really good.i liked your exciting adventrues better tho. why cant that be a poem? it rolled along so well. this seems small next to it.like you eating your cornflakes and keeping an eye on your dad and uncle with the safe. soz i am still in your authors page to fully give myself over to this. good read x
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