the sun's rays reflect off the ocean in the morning
or the moon's image in the lagoon at night
the way a caterpillar change into a butterfly
a peacock with its colorful plumage
a spider weaving its web in different patterns
a bud blooming to a beautiful, delicate flower
the way a lioness care and look after her cubs
a deer struting her stuff in the forest like a model
untamed crystals and gems in the caves after a storm
unbridled and filled with glow to show the world
a beautiful friendship from innocent kindergarteners
the blue sky filled with blue jays, robins, crows, seagulls, pelicans, and pidgeons
a boy or girl with an honest spirit, modest self-esteem, and caring nature
the seven wonders of the world
a sunset over the meadows when the day is over
beauty is beautiful or ugly
both help shape the world to be its best
beauty in all forms
Author notes
user name: ichigosama.
please go easy on me. this poem is meant for showing beauty from all walks of life including nature.
A contest entry
- Define Beauty. by FlaviusArrianus.
950 points, ended June 14, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Beautiful minds....please enter. by islekine.
760 points, ended January 11, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do you think? please, don't be too cruel; nobody's perfect.
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beautiful imagery, and some well-thought out comparisions, this is a great write. I would have liked to have seen, however, some capital letters and punctuation to help balence the flow, but that is purely a personal thing.
All in all, Good job. And good luck.
Zach -
I appreciated the way that you took the theme of this contest and developed it so extensively. These are all aspects of beauty and I thank you for reminding us of that.
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And it is quite successful in demonstrating that beauty and your love for it. I would offer a few minor suggestions - the first and most prevalent for me, personally, would be to spell check. There are two blatant misspellings (in strutting & pigeons) but I am a stickler for spelling anyway! The only other thing I would say is that I would consider capitalization and punctuation for formality & structure reasons only.
Otherwise, I found this to be a lovely bit of poetry and I enjoyed it thoroughly.
Thank you for sharing & good luck in the contest! -
Go easy???
Oh you're in for it now...just kidding.
I am usually one to enjoy much darker poetry, but I must say, you had me with the title. There is really only one thing I would change about this, its in line 7. I would change it to:
The way a lioness cares and looks her cubs.
Other than that, I enjoyed the smile this piece brought to my face.
JS
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I love all the pictures your poem brings to life. I can almost hear some of them, too. Beauty is beautiful or ugly both help shape the world to be its best beauty in all forms. That's profound.
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