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Leaving You Today(Long)

As you leave today
Know my love will remain strong
And my doubts will remain weak

As you leave today
Know I am here for you
Even when your gone

As you leave today
My heart is unsure
Is time will take it's toll

As you leave today
Let me stare into your blue eyes
One more time

As you leave today
I pray God will give me the strength
To hold back tears

As you leave today
Let me hold you one last time
To engrave your aroma into my mind

As you leave today
I pray God will help you find me
In everything you do

As I walk away today
The tears form in my eyes
Only once I know you are not looking

As I walk away today
I try to fight the pain
Of knowing this week, could become month after month

As I walk away today
I hope I know how to live
Without your comforting words

As I walk away today
I want you to remember
I will always be your Brandy

As I walk away today
I know you are confident in our love
But yet I fear that God isn't

As I walk away today
I know regrets will haunt me
With what should have been said

As I walk away today
I hand you this letter
So you'll always have a piece of me

As we follow separate paths today
I know someday soon
Our paths will reunited

Author notes

Rawr! I'm a frog

Name: Blooming Poet

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • piccola silver member
    August 19, 2008

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    Congratulations on the Gold. I must admit that after awhile the repetition became too much for me. The thoughts expressed were good though and I thank you for entering.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 10, 2008

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    Oh this is such a deeply emotional and heart-breaking poem. I have felt that many times, and it really hurts. You've expressed it beautifully.

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • Blooming Poet
    August 10, 2008
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    This is heartbreak poems


  • Regretlove
    July 25, 2008
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    Wow - this touched me - thanks for entering.


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    July 5, 2008

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    Great i liked this alot. Its very well written and long My favorite part because it actully is so very true believe me i would know "As I walk away today I try to fight the pain Of knowing this week, could become month after month" that part was worded so very well.

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    :]

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    Shelly


  • XxemohatexX
    June 30, 2008

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    oh

    wow i wish everyone could wright like this wow this is wonderfull im so glad that whoever you are you entered my poem


  • Violinstrings silver member
    June 15, 2008
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    great style

    a nice description and words













  • OhNoChastity
    June 14, 2008

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    I like how the ending. It's optimistic, and the poem is sad and I could feel the emotion of leaving someone you love. I would suggest changing the repitition and maybe condescending some lines, or making the repeated stanzas longer. It just gets a bit too redundant during the middle. The emotion was strong, however.


  • LeilaJayne
    May 31, 2008

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    On line 9 i think 'is' should be 'if'. Apart from that, this is a brilliant poem!! So sad and so beautiful at the same time.
    Great work.

    p.s...i reli love the pic!! x

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