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Sideway Slants

Sideway slants hover 'round the heart ~

When a spirit is set free
across this chasm, there is a breeze
that nibbles on the senses,
and sends ripples through realizations

It holds a minute to navigate

the loss and plant a pulse
so quick, that swans in cocking head
turn in sweet remembrance

I listened to the words that wooed,
while winged on this open prairie,
as time spread itself thin, and knew
that love had no boundary

that it understood forgiving before

your tear has left

its small circumference on my soul,
and on your get-well huggy bear

Thoughts paint pictures as the mist
it falls, though it is made of air,

if I can catch its fragile canopy with

my unrelenting repenting eyes


perceptions will slant and have
a sound that I can touch,
strong enough to hold me aloft
but alas, I try and sighhh...

The roar of refusal refrains here,
and wings are on my heart
and the mist it still falls, covering
the places I have left traces in

I want to stay in this sideways
slant, look across the nub of time,
slide past the dreary dreams,
with my cup under the flow of stars

but it is time to transcend dreams,
I have love to give and warmth
awaits my splendor in the grass,
as I watch the bright of dragonfly
stop above this pond, slant sideways
and then move on

Sideway slants hover (always) in my heart ~










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A contest entry for: "Poetry and Other Sharp Objects"

Springboard from the title. Free Verse.
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  • Night Hope gold member
    June 7, 2008

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    What a touching piece this is, Poet. Melancholy, magical, memorable & sweetly penned. Thank you for entering my contest with such a wonderful poem, Nicky. Good luck. Wanda


  • Soft-Rain gold member
    June 3, 2008

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    This was so magical~
    Whispers of poet in such delicate words.

    I want to stay in this sideways
    slant, look across the nub of time,
    slide past the dreary dreams,
    with my cup under the flow of stars

    Outstanding!
    Lifetime


  • simpliciti
    June 2, 2008

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    just roll me up

    just roll me up and toss me into the sea! LOL this is a great write and kept me going on and on and on! Each verse is powerful and a poem in its own...surely can see why this is a winner! Congrats...I've to visit your work more often! All the best


  • Wolfdog silver member
    June 2, 2008

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    Superb

    An excellent write, I quite like the flow and imagery which you created. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • Run Rhen Run
    June 2, 2008

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    its like.. really.. soft like. i like it. very nice, its like really heaveny. i dont know what else to say...


  • Origami Shapes
    June 2, 2008

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    A good soft atmosphere presented here, and alliteration which slings sighs across the sky of love. Perception’s always moving as lives slide along their course. Good strong imagery used with twirls of nature and smiles.


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    June 2, 2008
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    This is a lovely poem. I like the sideways slant idea.


  • crazymomma
    June 2, 2008

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    OMG! This is amazing. The imagery was lovely. I loved the dragonfly reference. Lovely metaphores too. I really enjoyed this poem


  • swim.x
    June 2, 2008

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    This is really an amazing poem.
    A good break from some of the darker, more depressing poems that are on this site.
    I loved it.


  • Robin Candor
    May 26, 2008

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    You should have won gold here or perhaps platinum? Here we go again with your ability to expose a soul whether yours or the character in the piece. It does not matter. You have captured my focus and I am awaiting your next big triumph. Don't back down and do not quit. I would say that of most authors who reside here you deserve a shot at the big time if it hasn't already come to you. RC


  • LadyLavender gold member
    May 26, 2008

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    thankyou for inspiring me. I've not read a write to affect me so as yours have. This is pristine.

    Brava!


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    May 26, 2008
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    Oh man, this is powerful in its beautiful words and prhases and iamges....bravo, pen


  • Greaks
    May 26, 2008

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    a bit sad... but determined... i LOVED IT!!!!!

    ""but it is time to transcend dreams,
    I have love to give and warmth
    awaits my splendor in the grass,
    as I watch the bright of dragonfly
    stop above this pond, slant sideways
    and then move on ""

    INSPIRATIONAL TO THE LAST dEGREE!!!

    GREAT WORK!!!


  • Cannonsfire
    May 25, 2008

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    Gorgeous, but then I already knew you could pen it this way, seems so softly sad but love still echoes in the words. Chez

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