She, at her finest, narcissistic beauty
In the locks of her cold, blonde hair
The hate in her frigid, blue glare
He, seeking marriage to maiden, fair
Prehensility in his coal, black gaze
Lure in the riches of his golden praise
High society, at the New Years Ball
The kiss of demise
From her loving guise
A bachelor he remains
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She's beauty... He wants marriage... Still a bachelor in the end? What happened to the 'happily ever after?'
Maybe this stanza tells all?
"High society, at the New Years Ball
The kiss of demise
From her loving guise"
Either one of two senerios: One The kiss was horrible! I've known some hot guys that just couldn't kiss for the life of them. Or... Two, the kiss 'from her loving guise' was another dude. Which also I have seen happen... they get spotted and the one who thought he had a faithful woman was sure to discover the 'truth.' A poem of the 'classic' tales of a beautiful girl kissing her 'Prince Charming' in a sense, but instead of the fall in-love and live happily ever after they go their separate ways. Nice twist! Thanks for entering the Round contest. I hope I understood what you were trying to convey. Good luck to you! -
Very well done
Sorry libithina, but the correct spelling is bachelor. Thankyou for sharing, CJ Poet Laureate. -
This is very good. I truly enjoyed reading this. You write very well. Keep up the good work.
~A-Dog~
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Beautiful in it's sadness, thank you for your entry. Best of luck in the contest.
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This poem is so wonderfully written. Are you really 14? You write like a fully mature woman. Fess up! You are too darned good.LOL
Linda
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Thank you
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he tried to woo fair lady but 'a batchelor he remains'
Beaute
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