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With Only You Or Only Me

As the two sit at a table
Immersed in heated conversation
Debating that each of

Their points ring most true

 

The first spoke with conviction
Without out you
There’d be no pain
No thoughts of misery


Sadness would be unheard of
A world that flowed serene

Shaking with mirth the other
Slowly shakes his head and grins
How would you know
The merits of pleasure
Without the caress of pain

Without the depths of misery
Why would a spirit love to soar

Serenity so mundane
Without a moments change
Its beauty would be unknown
Without the saddest of refrains


So the balance we must keep

So the Devil spoke
Laughing with such irony
What would this world be Lord
With only you or only me

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  • SexyAngel0418
    June 6, 2008

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    awesome!!! Another well deserved gold trophy!!! You did a great job on this one as well!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth


  • EternitysLastWish
    May 27, 2008

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    Wow... I really like it, the little twist at the end brought a chuckle from me!
    A very true-to-life poem, neutrally balanced when it comes to expressing the points and beliefs of each side which really makes the reader think, because there is no bias which might pull the reader's mind further one way than the other. It makes us ask, what is the difference between pain and pleasure, anyway? Between right and wrong, even? And how far do we draw the line? In a society where the answers are found in our own individual sets of values, this poem is the sort of thing we need, to remind us. It's definitely what the site needed.
    Nicely structured and set out, and beautifully worded, expressing the message perfectly!

    Keep it up... looking forward to more!
    Jess


  • Lil-Bit Crazy
    May 26, 2008

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    great write here... good vs evil..... what a take you did... thans for sharing adn good luck in contest..!


  • darlintlc silver member
    May 26, 2008

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    Loved it!! I always wondered if Good and Evil sit down and have just this kind of talk!!

    "What would this world be Lord
    With only you or only me"

    "Serenity so mundane
    without a moments change
    Its beauty would be unknown
    Without the saddest of refrains"

    "So the balance we must keep"

    Great poem although "evil" did have the last word! lol
    Thanks for entering and good luck!!
    darlintlc


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 25, 2008

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    Wow! That is brilliant! I wonder sometimes if we do have to know pain to know pleasure.. I'm not so sure..

    I love how you balanced the two sides here

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