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Just Friends

Something about you will always make me spark
You were always a good friend, was always there
I could talk to you when I was in the dark
I could talk to you when life was hard to bare

You always say I have saved your life
From that terrible terrifying knife
Now you are bringing me back alive
When I thought I wouldn't be able to survive

As time passes the spark grows more each day
I can't stand being just friends anymore
I find myself thinking about everything you say
I'm hoping our friendship has opened a new door

But for now we are just friends



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  • InMyFlames
    July 8, 2008
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    aww so sad, i really know that feeling unfortunatly, great work


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    June 29, 2008

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    This is an awesome poem. Sometimes friendship turn into much more if it is between a girl and a guy. I enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • funckymonkey
    June 15, 2008
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    This poem is great!!
    I really enjoyed reading it!
    I liked how you ended the poem.


  • Leanna-bean
    June 13, 2008

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    I really liked this poem...I have been in the "just friends" zone one to many times. Thank you for your entry and good luck! I hope you and the person in your poem can build on your friendship!

  • piccola silver member
    June 10, 2008

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    thank you for entering. The hot pink background doesn't fit the poetry (in my opinion) In some places the rhyme is nice, then in others it falters ... with some work it will be very good though.

    When I see that other judges have offered suggestions such as a color change or smoothing the rhyme and you refuse to take suggestions, then go on and enter other contests it really bothers me. That's one of the reasons I didn't move you ahead.


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    May 31, 2008
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    Thank you for entering my contest. The poem is nice and touching although changing the rhyming sceme in the middle of the poem really throws the flow off and is distracting.Thank you for entering my contest.


  • zochit2me gold member
    May 30, 2008

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    -Left align only please

    The color of this background is WAY to bright for me. Too many filler words and the rhyme needs work as well...

    Thank you for entering and best of luck

    Becky


  • Midgetbridgey
    May 30, 2008

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    I will comment once the contest is nearly finished :) best of luck plx comment me :) -midgetbridgey

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