Wet with tears & raindrops,
they traipsed a whimsical dance;
unabashed,
un-choreographed,
arrhythmic
mayhem--
typewriter fingers at best . . .
. . . and worst.
Author notes
20 on the button, I believe.
A contest entry
- 20 words or less [open all day] by blackday.
700 points, ended May 31, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Bravo!
Love the presentation, the passion & the image you convey! 
I've felt like this many times when writting! 
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This is one of the betters ones in this contest. You really used style & kept your voice without over doing it.
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i like it.
the phrase rocks:
"they traipsed a whimsical dance"
good luck!
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Mhm. Now this is what I'm talking about. Great work! Original, interesting diction, excellent word placement. Very good job with this!
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