Solitude,
flowing as waves,
across a rose tipped sky.
Gathering momentium,
as clouds drift in lazy luxury,
towards a moon clad night.
Noisy chatter silenced by
a cordial song of the nighingale,
he stands alone.
Just clear notes sung
in the evening dusk,
sharp and intune.
Broken silence,
stilled once more,
as intruder and song bird become one.
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Amazing :)!
I think it's really good! I love the imagery and its flow; sounds very natural.
My favourite lines are:
"as clouds drift in lazy luxury,
towards a moon clad night."
Very powerful and original.
Excellent Work. This poem is inspiring and brings out the nature's beauty thoroughly
Vey beautiful thoughts
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Thank you very much for your lovely comments, appreciated as always...
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nice
I like how it incorporates many aspects of nature to portray solitude, as if solitude isn't about being by yourself, but in nature and enjoying it's beauty, both visual and auditory. You've done very well, keep writing. -
wow!~ first time comming across ur poetry and from the look of this awesome write..i doubt it will be the last..very impressive..beautiful piece..just the right word.and the flow is too perfect..
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Thank you for your lovely comments, as always, very much appreciated
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Yes indeed the relationship of the self with the surrounding has its own place while you depict the self and to relate the surrounding through it..your inside is lost but the outside is touched in it..the immagery is wonderfully depicted by the heart of the poet while describing the story of the solitude..the music of the heart is combined with the scenario of the nature..I love this wonderful piece..well done..
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This is a beautiful and soothing nature write. You have used some wonderful imagery also. "Gathering momentium,
as clouds drift in lazy luxury,
towards a moon clad night"
I especially enjoyed that stanza. Nice! Blessings, Patty
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Many thanks for your kindness
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beautiful thoughts on the subject.
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Thank you
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Ms Cutie, you don't write often enough (for me). You are always at your best when absorbed in nature. (Thank you.)
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