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Some Quiet thoughts

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Solitude,
flowing as waves,
across a rose tipped sky.

Gathering momentium,
as clouds drift in lazy luxury,
towards a moon clad night.

Noisy chatter silenced by
a cordial song of the nighingale,
he stands alone.

Just clear notes sung
in the evening dusk,
sharp and intune.

Broken silence,
stilled once more,
as intruder and song bird become one.

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  • Amazing :)!

    I think it's really good! I love the imagery and its flow; sounds very natural.
    My favourite lines are:

    "as clouds drift in lazy luxury,
    towards a moon clad night."

    Very powerful and original.
    Excellent Work. This poem is inspiring and brings out the nature's beauty thoroughly Vey beautiful thoughts

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    • cutiepie gold member
      August 18
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      Thank you very much for your lovely comments, appreciated as always...
  • rooftop-writer
    August 15

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    nice

    I like how it incorporates many aspects of nature to portray solitude, as if solitude isn't about being by yourself, but in nature and enjoying it's beauty, both visual and auditory. You've done very well, keep writing.

  • crivanea
    August 5

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    wow!~ first time comming across ur poetry and from the look of this awesome write..i doubt it will be the last..very impressive..beautiful piece..just the right word.and the flow is too perfect..

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    • cutiepie gold member
      August 6
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      Thank you for your lovely comments, as always, very much appreciated
  • Yes indeed the relationship of the self with the surrounding has its own place while you depict the self and to relate the surrounding through it..your inside is lost but the outside is touched in it..the immagery is wonderfully depicted by the heart of the poet while describing the story of the solitude..the music of the heart is combined with the scenario of the nature..I love this wonderful piece..well done..

  • paw-writer silver member
    July 3

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    This is a beautiful and soothing nature write. You have used some wonderful imagery also. "Gathering momentium,
    as clouds drift in lazy luxury,
    towards a moon clad night"
    I especially enjoyed that stanza. Nice! Blessings, Patty

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  • celadia
    May 31
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    beautiful thoughts on the subject.

  • wattle silver member
    May 28

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    Ms Cutie, you don't write often enough (for me). You are always at your best when absorbed in nature. (Thank you.)

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