And there -- a voice
loosened the memory...
where fear stood
on the edge of harm
and red skimmed eyes' rims-
running to catch mind's absence.
Recognition stroked gaze,
poked peace,
praised grace,
embraced self in loss of love,
as calm cascaded
and smiled,
and hands offered hope
to thin thrums of illness
as cheekbones shook
in jowls and throat
and remembrance howled
in candle's burn.
Glance spread
like grey streamers,
sitting weak
in long lines of longing
and dreams dallied...
so long ago
in aborted sepia sunsets.
Sight fired desire
in sky and on shore,
as two-year tours
tempted fate and game
and pride nodded sideways
in breath and bone,
as words wept weightless
from strapless thumbs.
Oh! how to start
and where to end?
Narrow needs
drew tired...to fade-
and death approached gently
with joy's jovial stride,
belying belief in belonging
and the bearing of a body
once healthy and free,
flew too fast, to fall
in rain and ash.
A contest entry
- FOR ALL MY FAVS BECAUSE I AM A PAIN IN THE SOFT SPOT LOL by Swan song.
2400 points, ended July 5, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Honorable mention
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Now this is a very good poem and one that i will read again
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What a beautiful poem you have here. Thank you for entering my contest.
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I like this very much! Such subtle rhyme and consonance, and yet so gentle and deep. Such flow and grace. Great work poet! Keep penning!
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there is so much here, second reading was more revealing than the first; fascinating like looking within a person while they look without and describe the rise and falls of life...such a talented writer so able to reflect such deeply personal concepts so that others can understand...excellent work...PK
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wonderful, so deep, I enjoyed this so much I read it a few times.
as words wept weightless
I love this line. -
and pride nodded sideways
'in breath and bone,
as words wept weightless
from strapless thumbs.'
interesting and well written, the flow was excellent
and the content suggestive to interpretation, though loss echoes throughout.
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A really touching write. So deep
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Absolutely Moving!
I think that this poem is so forceful and deep.
You can really feel the words move you and you can invison this is your mind so clearly. I really enjoyed it. Keep up the amazing writing!!!
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